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                                                                         Title: 9/10
Okay, I liked your title (it fits well with your story), but it told me the whole plot of the story, and didn’t leave any surprises. The reason I gave you a nine is because this is a fanfiction site. Most fanfics have titles like this, so...yeah, you get a nine. 
                                                                       Foreword: 5/15 
The foreword, like the title, just gave the entire plot away in seven sentences. Also, the quote “We got bored,” was REALLY cliche. I would’ve left right there (not to be hurtful or anything...just a saying). Instead of just starting your story with what would be on the first chapter, maybe you could explain a small part of the plot in detail and then end it with a question. Make the reader EXCITED to know what happens next.
On the BRIGHT side though, I really love stories like this (the ones where people play games and some of the players fall in love^^). 
                                                                     Overall Look: 3/5 
I like the colors; it fits well with the story. However, your background image cuts off at E. You can maybe make the picture smaller, so the whole title would fit. Perhaps, it may be easier to put a plain pattern as the background.
                                                                   Grammar: 25/30
Your grammar’s not bad. There were sentence fragments and run-on sentences here and there, but otherwise it was easy to read.  “Suzy clasped her hands and prayed that Baekhyun would choose her, because she didn't want to be Myungsoo's partner; she didn't like his cold attitude, whilst Jiyeon fiddled with her fingers nervously and hoped that Baekhyun would choose her,” can be split in half. The sentence, “If I choose Jiyeon, I'm afraid that she will make my heart froze,” mixed up past and present tense. “I’m afraid that she will make my heart freeze,” would be the correct word. Lastly, in “‘Lee Jieun, you're not ugly, but darn cute.’ Taemin slipped out,” the period after cute should be a comma. The only time you’re supposed to put a period is when you want to end a sentence. If you say “Taemin slipped out,” put a comma. :D
                                                                     Spelling: 20/20 
So far, I haven’t encountered any spelling mistakes (maybe some careless ones, but none that bothered me), so good job! 
                                                                         Flow: 5/15
I couldn’t tell who the lovers were at first. They were conversing with each other, but it was a little hard for all that information to sink in. If necessary, make a character chart. Otherwise, I would suggest using the first three chapters to explain each of the couples. Also, the story progressed really fast. They switched lovers from the beginning (once again, explain the couples?). I have no idea what the is going to be (other than the new lovers falling in love possibly?). There are no hints to what will happen otherwise (it just seems like a happy game). 
                                                                     Originality: 5/5 
Very original. However, I do believe this will never happen :P. I don’t think anyone (who has someone they love a lot) would get “bored” and want to switch with their friend...

Total: 72/100 

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Reviewed by: musicxdance

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