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Title: 6/10 : 

He's something sounds a bit cliche for me. You should define what you mean by 'He's Something'. I suggest that you use 'He's Different' as your title, since your story is explaining an unique friendship. 

Foreword: 9/15 :

Well done. I loved the way you introduced your characters; it's straightforward and simple. However, I felt like your foreword is too plain. You need something...if you add some pictures, it will be nice. 

There's something wrong on your description. You wrote,
"So it came as quite a shock when Juhyun announced that he wanted his new best friend to be Heejin." 
Honey, you should fix your sentence. It took a while for me to understand what you truly meant with the sentence. You should write,
"So, it came as quite a shock when Juhyun announced that he wanted Heejin to be his best friend." It sounds better and not too rambly for me. :) The idiom, "A needle in the haysack," is misused. That idiom means it is difficult. If anything, a needle in the haysack would by different from the rest of the hay. "The only thing that stood out about him, was his height and the only good that came out of that was helping small people get books off the shelf," can be split into two sentences. If not, you may want to move the comma, so it would look like this:  "The only thing that stood out about him was his height; and the only good that came out of that was helping small people get books off the shelf."

Overall Look: 4/5 : 

It looked good and fun. I love the color of yellow too :p 

Your poster is cute, but isn't the poster supposed to be show two friends from different worlds? For me, your poster looked like a traveling boy from out of the world, but your layout is definitely great and funky :3 

Grammar: 30/30 :

Oh my God! Your grammar is almost perfect :) I'm happy that I didn't find any fatal grammar mistakes in your story, hahaha.

Spelling: 20/20 :

No matter how many times I read over your story, I couldn't find any mistakes in the spelling section. Good job! 

Flow: 8/15 :

Your flow is fine, but in some paragraphs I found that the conversation was moving too fast without any explanation. 

Originality: 3/5 :

There are a lot of stories that have the same plot as your story, but I think it's just coincidence.

TOTAL: 80/100

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Reviewed by: LizFilizy

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