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His Heart is Mine! by minniethepooh

Title (2/5)

The title is cliche and it sounds a bit bratty.

 

Appearance (2/5)

It’s good that you have a poster, but the poster doesn’t really show the story, just a picture of the main character. It would be better to include a picture Hyunseung, Hyuna, and maybe B2ST. Plus, the poster & background gives off a angst mood.

 

Description/Foreword (9/15)

The description is a good, short summary of the overview of the story, but the part at the end that says, “HIS HEART IS YOURS” is a bit awkward. I like that in the foreword, you showed some traits and the personalities of the characters.

 

Plot (10/25)

Again, the plot is cliche and I have seen this kind of plot where the girls chase after the guys and they both eventually fall in love. But I like it how the story is set at Cube Ent., somewhere unique and special, instead of at an ordinary school or at home.

 

Characters (12/15)

The characters are a little more unique which I like. Hyunseung is a cold-hearted, mean, rude guy (cliche) while the OC seems again, bratty, spoiled and determi

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500sunny500 #1
@reeseee3: Sorry! We're closed! >.< However, we made a new request shop right here:
http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/231323
The forms are the same, so you can just copy and paste! :D
500sunny500 #2
@scarlettwolf: I think I understand what you mean. However, in our current generation, we use single spaces instead of double spaces. Double spaces were used a long time ago because it was harder to tell if the punctuations were single spaced. Nowadays, we can easily tell the spaces because each key on your keyboard uses up to same. I'm not sure if I got your point, but here's the link where I got all this information: http://desktoppub.about.com/cs/typespacing/a/onetwospaces.htm
scarlettwolf #3
It appears to be AFF... =/ (at least in the comments)
Well anyways, as long as you know about it(like how to double space), I'm fine with it.
scarlettwolf #4
hmm...
Well, I think it's AFF. It looks like there is only one space when there are really two...
It's in every chapter I think too. But it seems it's AFF...
Hi. I'm scarlettwolf
Hi. I'm scarlettwolf
500sunny500 #5
@scarlettwolf: We're not exactly sure what you're talking about. ^^;; Would you please mind pointing out the chapter we made our mistake on?
scarlettwolf #6
AYO! ^^
Not really gonna say too much, and I have no idea if this is just AFF being weird, but after a period, exclamation mark, etc. you need to have double spacing. Like right there.
Maybe it's just AFF formatting, I couldn't really tell... ._.
ShanghaiTiger #7
I'll credit you tomorrow, okay?
ShanghaiTiger #8
thanks :)
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