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Latte Heartstrings by Kim_Hanyu

Title (2.5/5)

It is an unique title, but not very eye-catching.

 

Appearance (5/5)

Poster and background are just cute! It also matches the mood of the story. Perfect!

 

Description/Foreword (7/15)

It’s nice that you have a little quote in the description, but it might bore the reader. Maybe, a little summary or some quotes that would make the reader want to read your story. In the foreword, it would be great to have a description for all the major characters who will be appearing in your story so readers can see how they look like, their personalities, etc.

 

Plot (11/25)

Your story is not cliché, but it gives the reader the feeling that you just know what will happen in the end. But, I can see the originality in your story, so I’ll give you some points for that.

 

Characters (0/15)

The characters are cliché and dull. Try giving one of them some rudeness or one of them a dirty-minded head. Give them some “spice!”

 

Writing (Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation) (10/20)

Incorrect: We never really thought we’d meet at all I guess. I was working as a singer for a café with my band. He was a usual customer there. We attended the same school but

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500sunny500 #1
@reeseee3: Sorry! We're closed! >.< However, we made a new request shop right here:
http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/231323
The forms are the same, so you can just copy and paste! :D
500sunny500 #2
@scarlettwolf: I think I understand what you mean. However, in our current generation, we use single spaces instead of double spaces. Double spaces were used a long time ago because it was harder to tell if the punctuations were single spaced. Nowadays, we can easily tell the spaces because each key on your keyboard uses up to same. I'm not sure if I got your point, but here's the link where I got all this information: http://desktoppub.about.com/cs/typespacing/a/onetwospaces.htm
scarlettwolf #3
It appears to be AFF... =/ (at least in the comments)
Well anyways, as long as you know about it(like how to double space), I'm fine with it.
scarlettwolf #4
hmm...
Well, I think it's AFF. It looks like there is only one space when there are really two...
It's in every chapter I think too. But it seems it's AFF...
Hi. I'm scarlettwolf
Hi. I'm scarlettwolf
500sunny500 #5
@scarlettwolf: We're not exactly sure what you're talking about. ^^;; Would you please mind pointing out the chapter we made our mistake on?
scarlettwolf #6
AYO! ^^
Not really gonna say too much, and I have no idea if this is just AFF being weird, but after a period, exclamation mark, etc. you need to have double spacing. Like right there.
Maybe it's just AFF formatting, I couldn't really tell... ._.
ShanghaiTiger #7
I'll credit you tomorrow, okay?
ShanghaiTiger #8
thanks :)
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