{review} Calling turnbaek
★ Silly Dreams Request Shop ◕ ◡ ◕The Doll With Ramen Hair by turnbaek
Title (5/5)
Cute, unique, eye-catching, funny. Perfect!
Appearance (4/5)
Poster and background are cute, but does not really match with the mood of the story.
Description/Foreword (10/15)
Your description is a bit messy, but that one sentence, (“what if one day you bought a cursed doll?”), gives off suspense and does make me want to read more! But, the banner belongs at the bottom of the foreword, since it is like a forum header.
Foreword – beautiful. You have the character cast and a short sneak peek! Everything’s there!
Plot (25/25)
Plot was unique, I can tell that the storyline is completely owned by you!
Characters (8/15)
The characters are slightly cliché, but I can tell that you tried to give some originality and some specialness to each character.
Writing (Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation) (13/20)
Chapter 1
Incorrect: “Careless , careless , shoot anonymous , anonymous , heartless , mindless , no one care about me,” you hummed along to your favourite song that was sung by your favourite band.
Correct: “Careless, careless. Shoot anonymous, anonymous. Heartless, mindless. No one care about me,” you hummed along to your favorite song that was sung by your favorite band.
Note: Please don’t put any spaces between each punctuation
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