Unnie, Thank You for Everything by yoongseororo

Title (4/5)

I never seen a title like this, so I got to say that it caught my attention. The only problem is that it's supposed to  be, "Unnie, Thank You For Everything" instead of "Unnie, Thank you for Everything". 

Appearance (4/5)

I really love the poster! It's simple, but it has everything it needs. The only problem I have with it is that it's kind of hard to see the word, "Unnie".

Description/Foreword (12/15)

I like how you introduced the character and gave a little part of the story so that the readers can have a little taste of what they would be reading. Despite the fact that there were a few grammatical errors in the foreword and in the description, it caught my attention. In addition, it's nice to give the readers a bit about the characters, but it's best to show the readers than tell them. 

Plot (17/25)

I can't say that the plot is unique because I've seen this, but I added more points because finding this kind of story is a bit unlikely to find here on AFF. However, I wished that you could've described the plot a bit more. For an example, you could've described how the club looked like, or the busy and crowded station.

One thing I dislike about the change of P.O.V in the story is that you have to remember to put whose point of view it is. As a writer who had wrote P.O.V fanfics in the past, I find that there is more confusion in stories with P.O.V  because if you forget to write whose point of view it is, the readers would be confused as well.

Characters (12/15)

The characters weren't quite unique, but I liked how you were able to add your own "voice" to the character, if you know what I mean. What I disliked about the story was how random and unimportant characters were added. For an example, you could've added only some of