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L. Joe: The Stupid Cupid I Ever Met by HNsenpai

Title (3/5)

The title is extremely cute! But, your title has bad grammar. Instead of “L.Joe: The Stupid Cupid I Ever Met!” it is supposed to be either: 

L. Joe: The Most Stupid Cupid I’ve/I Have Ever Met! L. Joe: The Stupid Cupid I Met!

Remember to put a space between the “L.” and “Joe.”

 

Appearance (2/5)

It would be better to have a poster for your story. Your background is a little strange and awkward, too. I’ll give you some points for at least having a picture of L. Joe and a background.

 

Description/Foreword (7.5/15)

So, I will just be ignoring the “status – hiatus” post. But, the other part of your foreword simply seems a bit too general and it does not really tell the reader what story they will be reading. Also, you have a small spelling error. “Hye” is supposed to be “hey,” well, I’m just guessing that is what you’re trying to say. What my language arts teacher always say, “Always revise and edit!”

Your foreword is perfect. There’s a summary for your story, the characters and their personality, even contents of the story. Great!

 

Plot (25/25)

This plot is extremely unique! I’ve never read any story with a plot like yours. It’s fun, creative, and cute. Full points!

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500sunny500 #1
@reeseee3: Sorry! We're closed! >.< However, we made a new request shop right here:
http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/231323
The forms are the same, so you can just copy and paste! :D
500sunny500 #2
@scarlettwolf: I think I understand what you mean. However, in our current generation, we use single spaces instead of double spaces. Double spaces were used a long time ago because it was harder to tell if the punctuations were single spaced. Nowadays, we can easily tell the spaces because each key on your keyboard uses up to same. I'm not sure if I got your point, but here's the link where I got all this information: http://desktoppub.about.com/cs/typespacing/a/onetwospaces.htm
scarlettwolf #3
It appears to be AFF... =/ (at least in the comments)
Well anyways, as long as you know about it(like how to double space), I'm fine with it.
scarlettwolf #4
hmm...
Well, I think it's AFF. It looks like there is only one space when there are really two...
It's in every chapter I think too. But it seems it's AFF...
Hi. I'm scarlettwolf
Hi. I'm scarlettwolf
500sunny500 #5
@scarlettwolf: We're not exactly sure what you're talking about. ^^;; Would you please mind pointing out the chapter we made our mistake on?
scarlettwolf #6
AYO! ^^
Not really gonna say too much, and I have no idea if this is just AFF being weird, but after a period, exclamation mark, etc. you need to have double spacing. Like right there.
Maybe it's just AFF formatting, I couldn't really tell... ._.
ShanghaiTiger #7
I'll credit you tomorrow, okay?
ShanghaiTiger #8
thanks :)
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