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Title [8/10]

Personally, the title is a bit too common for me but at least it gives me a sheer idea of what the story is. I think that maybe the title, 'Next Door' will be much better as readers will be curious, like thinking, 'What Next Door? Oh gosh! I should read it to find out!". You get what I mean?

Description [9/10]

Nice description but I don't think it gives the idea of what is the main plot of the story although the title already did. I have a question though, why 2011? Anyway, it makes a little no sense to me, like how can you hear your mother where you are in the room?

Story Plot & Developement [30/30]

You sure have events to lead to the most important part of the story. My heart was basically thumping as I finish reading each chapter because I am so excited to find out what will happen next. I neeed more updates >_<

Grammar [20/30]

*Correction [Chapter 1, Paragraph 2] : The thing here is that my neighbours are idols who's debuting tomorow.

*Correction [Chapter 1, Paragraph 2] : We've been in the same neighbour for years, maybe it was way back about about four years ago since they've moved in, back then, I was thirteen.

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