☎Mrs_SuperJuinor : You have to live
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Title [10/10]
The story is about a boy with a miserable life and committing suicide started to bloom in the boy's mind and heart. Then, there's come the hero, Donghae, trying to encourage Hyukjae to not jump from the roof. There's no better title, isn't it? :3
Description [7.5/10]
Your description is beautiful! It was written beautifully and I love it! However, your punctuation mistakes makes your score dropped a bit. Good try!
Story Plot & Developement [20.5/30]
Oh. My. God. The story is so beautiful! It matches the plot perfectly! I love how you make it happy, then sad, then, happy again, like there were ups and downs! Nevertheless, to me, the story is moving too fast. I think you should put more scenes on how Mr. Oh had tortured Hyukjae until Hyukjae was traumatized with him, and this will make the readers felt pity on him and will be interested in knowing what will happen next :D
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