☎Leejlicious : Phantom of the fang
✾Enchanting Hail Review Shop✾Finishing Requests&Hiring
Please Subscribe to read the full chapter
Banner #1
Banner #2
Title [3/10]
The title doesn't catch my attention, at least to me it doesn't. It's creative, give you props for that, yet it doesn't match the story entirely nor the description.
Description [10/10]
The description is well written and there you had me, but it plot doesn't connect completely with the description. Maybe its because it isn't finished yet.
Story Plot & Development [10/30]
The plot is very interesting and I see what are you trying to do but the development is really poor. I don't see it going anywhere. All I see are characters taking action between each other but no actual story development.
Grammar [14/30]
Is not that bad but you really need to get your game going on the punctuation marks, some of the
Please Subscribe to read the full chapter
Comments