☎daihyu : You are my Everything
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Title [6/10]
The title is actually quite common, I have seen it a couple of times in AFF before. But, I must admit, it is a good one. You lose points for those for the lack of originality
Description [10/10]
It does not give away too much information and gives the reader an idea of what the story is about. It is, a mystery to me, how you authors, know how to write awesome description, like I have said in one of my previous reviews, I do write some stories (kept in draft mood) and my description like hell. Mind giving me some tips?
Story Plot & Developement [26/30]
You definately have a great plot ahead, although, I must say, the kiss was sort of fast. Maybe you should write out in the further chapters, you could put more events to it, like how Taeyeon rejected him and Baekhyun working hard to win her heart and they finally kiss....
Grammar [25/30]
Some of the sentence are quite hard for me to understand.
Corrections :
Chapter 1, Paragraph 1 : Baekhyun was a nervous wreck ever since the previous night.
Chapter 1, Paragraph 2 : Today was the only day EXO had a break off in a while, and it was the one and only day that Girls' Generation had as well
Chapter 1, Paragraph 10 [Okay, maybe this wasn't a grammar error but I thoughts it was a bit unprofesio
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