☎karmachameleon : I'm not the only one
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Title [5/10]
I don't really understand why you put that title, I can't relate it to your plot at all. I know it was inspired by Sam Smith's I'm not the only one and it was about cheating but is still weird for me. I also don't think it was original at all. Sure, it was a 'song inspired' story but maybe you can put a new title of your own?
Description [6/10]
First, it does not give the readers an idea of what the story is about, a simple sentence : 'The happiest day in Baekhyun's life'. You didn't specify whether is during their wedding day or when he wrote the perfect song which is really vaugue. Okay, maybe it did intrest me a little because I want to find out what excatly is going on, however, I won't suggest you using this kind of description at all.
Story Plot & Developement [27/30]
This is perfect, is almost like in real life and you definately have thought up of events to slowly lead up to the main plot, this is the most perfect thing I have ever read. But, I think you could have written more about when Baekhyun found out his wife were cheating on him, perhaps, change his reaction or something, that would be more interesting!
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