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Title [10/10]
The title of this story it sure those matches the concept of the story, it's eye catching and not overly done. So I got nothing to review here. You did well.
Description [8/10]
The description didn't gave away too much neither too little. Its very pleasing when one first read it but not enough to catch on readers attention. However the things written match with the content inside the story.
Story Plot & Development : [14/30]
The is good and its an original idea for plot but I don't see where you want to lead the reader. The development of this story is poor. You should sit down and write in another place apart where do you want to lead a reader to other than the information you already gave. Because then it wouldn't run in circles. It goes back and f
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