Amber POV

Serenity's Guardians

"Yo Amber here,  I'm sixteen years old, my ability allows me to control the weather I can make storms, snow, rain, and I can stop it too it's pretty cool. We don't like humans to much except for when we met Tao he was a true wolf from the start. There was just something about him probably his smell and how he would act but even though he is still WAY tougher than any human he is still a huge scaredy cat."

"Oh don't look at me like that you know it's true" Amber scoffs 

"KRIS!!" 

"Wha... no don't get Kris. Tao! Get back here! My god why are you so annoying!" Amber whines

Another click and the screen goes blank

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Vay_Kook_ #1
YOUR FIC COMPLETES ME OMFG LET ME LOVE YOU
KouAkira #2
Chapter 13: The plot and story are good. :)

But, I think you should beta for some misspelling and adjust articles to be a paragraph with full tenses which can describe the action or scene smoothly.

I don't know if it happened to me only or not, because I opened the site to read the story on iPhone, and some of your tenses in each paragraph are separated to be one tense in two paragraphs.

For the example from this chapter;
"then I pull out another arrow and let it fly into the head of the human. Theres nothing we can do for them anyway there

is no cure except to be bitten but we're not gonna go around and bite all the humans that get infected not only is"

(It really was like this)

It made me couldn't read your story smoothly and decreased the mood of your story while I read.

Please don't be mad at me for the comment. I like your story, and want to read the next chapters and have fun with your story like the others too. But I just want you to know what I think. :)

And sorry if my English . Because English is not my native and I'm not good at it enough. _(_ _)_
sarahleto #3
Love this story!
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