Jonghyun POV

Serenity's Guardians

"Ok so is it just me or was there a bunch of whispering back there that we got left out of?" I think to Amber as we walk back to the old school. She was looking at the ground but now her head is up but she has enough sense not to look at me. 

"I was just thinking the same thing." she thinks 

"I can tell you if you promise not to tell." says a different voice

Me and Amber look up to see Jihoon standing in front of us with his hands in his jean pockets and a smirk on his face.

"Alright we promise now spill whats going on?" I think to him as we start to walk again before anyone noticed that we stopped.

"Do you promise Amber?" Asks Jihoon 

"Of course I do now get on with it." She thinks getting irritated. My sister is not one for patience.

"Alright alright calm down little pup I'll tell you." Jihoon thinks then looks to YuilHan who is getting a piggyback ride from Kris .

"Yuil had a vision" he thinks "it's about SoJung and a boy from the group of humans we're going to get. YuilHan says that SoJung is going to fallfor him." I was at a loss for words SoJung falling in love that is just crazy. Then all I hear is Amber laughing out loud like she was mad.

"Your such a liar" she says out loud, I just stare at her in disbelief. 

"Amber shut up" I think to her and she then notices her mistake and immediately stops laughing.

"Your funny Jihoon" I chuckle out loud trying to cover for my sisters little laughing fit, Jihoon just gives a small smile

" I'm not lying" Jihoon thinks irritably

"Sorry but you gotta admit it is kind of unbelievable" Amber thinks

"It's okay I laughed too when I found out " he thinks

"So he's in the group of humans we have to go get tomorrow?"  I ask

"Yeah" jihoon replies

"So he's human?" Thinks Amber

"Yeah" he repaeted

"Is YuilHan sure she didn't see SoJung feeding him to the zombies?" Thinks Amber causing Jihoon and I to crack a smile 

"Yes she is very sure of what she saw." Jihoon thinks

 "Wow I wonder how SoJung acts when shes in love?" Thinks Amber 

"Well I guess we'll find out pretty soon." Jihoon thinks as we reached the doors of the old school gym.

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Vay_Kook_ #1
YOUR FIC COMPLETES ME OMFG LET ME LOVE YOU
KouAkira #2
Chapter 13: The plot and story are good. :)

But, I think you should beta for some misspelling and adjust articles to be a paragraph with full tenses which can describe the action or scene smoothly.

I don't know if it happened to me only or not, because I opened the site to read the story on iPhone, and some of your tenses in each paragraph are separated to be one tense in two paragraphs.

For the example from this chapter;
"then I pull out another arrow and let it fly into the head of the human. Theres nothing we can do for them anyway there

is no cure except to be bitten but we're not gonna go around and bite all the humans that get infected not only is"

(It really was like this)

It made me couldn't read your story smoothly and decreased the mood of your story while I read.

Please don't be mad at me for the comment. I like your story, and want to read the next chapters and have fun with your story like the others too. But I just want you to know what I think. :)

And sorry if my English . Because English is not my native and I'm not good at it enough. _(_ _)_
sarahleto #3
Love this story!
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