AUTHOR: ystar16 STORY TITLE: Between Love and Infatuation..

Title (07/10): Interesting story title and I begin to see the infatuation in the first 4 chapters. Since the story goes no further, I can’t comment on the ‘love’ part, but so far it looks promising.

Characterization (04/10): My first impression of the characters is vague. The characters are flat and don’t hold much back. Their personalities are kind of black or white and kind of typical k-drama cliché. But what strikes me is that Minah seem to change her ways through the chapters when it comes to displaying emotions. She is bad at hiding them in one chapter, and becomes the master of hiding them the next. Siwan is the typical mysterious guy that tends to be lurking in the shadows. So far, he plays the role of an unhappy husband with close to no respect for Minah. I don’t know how much he will be for the rest of the plot, but so far, I don’t see him playing much of an important role aside from what we already know. Minah is a child in a woman’s body. She isn’t very considerate of others, she is very impulsive, and too emotional. She wants to be grown up, but she isn’t mentally ready for it. Jimin is simple. Too simple. So far, he is just innocent and a little too caring, and that’s it. There isn’t much more to say about him. I’m missing depth of the characters, more edge, more quirks...just more...

Themes (04/10): Love affair, adultery, and romance; the topics aren’t really clear yet. You can easily sense the adultery theme already now. It won’t take long before it’s properly introduced.

Setting (05/10): Luxury restaurants, office buildings, and extravagant parties. I have yet to see where this story is going to be different from other stories with the same themes.

Description and Foreword (08/10): The description and foreword fit the story very well and gives a clear understanding of what the story is about so far. It could be written a little differently to catch a potential reader better, but definitely one of the better.

Writing Style / Techniques (06/10): The writing is generally good without too many interrupting typos or grammatical errors. It’s consistent in tense too, which is a pleasure to read. That being said, the writing is kind of choppy. It’s short sentences, mainly focused on actions and thoughts.

Presentation (09/10): Very nice layout of the story. It’s easy to read and there’s a nice poster to follow it.

Structure and Flow (04/10): Just like mentioned in the writing style, the story is kind of choppy. There isn’t much in-depth in the story and the flow of the story is kind of like a hare on the run. Heading in one direction at a fast pace, before changing direction. It seems like some details of the story are added on a whim, and not really considered in comparison to the character, or the story’s development in itself. The flow isn’t all the elegant and the best feeling I can compare it to, is a tire that is flat on one side. The story goes somewhat smoothly, only to come to an abrupt hold before it continues a little further down the road.

Plot (05/10): The plot isn’t all that new, and it’s almost too easy to guess where the story is going. Without thinking much, I came up with the following ideas: She is going to fall in love with the simple and poorer Jimin, cheat on her husband, get pregnant, and have a dilemma about staying with hubby or run away with Jimin. And whether to keep the child or not. Also, Jimin works as security in Minah’s office, so at some point he is going to save her from harm and be her knight in shining armor. When Siwan learns about her affair (because she is obviously going to pick Jimin in the end) she gets fired and she is shamed by her family for bringing dishonor to them.

Overall Enjoyment (05/10): It is one of those stories you feel you’ve already read before. And since there isn’t added much additional to the writing but the necessary feelings, thoughts, and actions, the story isn’t all that captivating. I would probably hang around for another update to see if there is any good twist that could make it interesting, but it’s not a story I’d have stuck around with without a major plot twist to keep me interested.

Overall Score: 57/100
Overall Percentage: 57%
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