AUTHOR: TIXAFOFI STORY TITLE: 50 SHADES OF MARKJIN.

Title (10/10): The title tells people what they should expect in fanfiction. It is not too long so it works. .

Characterization (7/10): The characterization is good enough. Even tho this is a story I would like you to actually bring out their personality more in the story. Since this isn't only but actually has a plot so characterization is important.

Themes (6/10): The part where Mark questions his uality is relatable to some people. Not understanding what you feel towards someone is something anyone can relate to. But people actually calling a e isn't. This category is about a story being relatable so I hope your not dissapointed with your score since, well stories are not that relatable..

Setting (10/10): There's nothing to say about that. You easily made it part of the plot how they got to some places (the kitchen, his house etc). 

Description and Foreword (8/10): It's great but I feel like you gave away too much information in description. Like you revealed that Mark will fall in love with Jinyoung in the description! .

Writing Style / Techniques (10/10): I have nothing to say about that. Your writing style is very good.

Presentation (10/10): Your poster is good, you have a nice background. You went into details. So your presentation is great. ^^

Structure and Flow (8/10): Your grammar is good . No need to worry about that. But your flow is rushed. I'm pretty sure someone can't fall in love with someone in 2 days. Have a crush on him,yes but actually fall in love - no. So you should have slowed it down. 

Plot (10/10): Your plot is good and different. But you should work on flow so you don't rush it too much.

Overall Enjoyment (9/10): Now I've read some fics before and I can tell you your is on point. But then you come crashing me with too sudden emotions. I feel like Jinyoung is feeling more grateful to Mark because he made love to him and not only had than actaully loving him. Mark is still kinda confused but actually knows he likes him. And is starting to fall in love with him (that's what his actions said at least).

Overall Score: 88/100
Overall Percentage: 88%
Reviewer's Note: Your story is good. There's a nice mix between and emotions. I remind you to stop rushing their emotions. And also don't worry about comments cause people rarely actually comment on stories for obvious reaons. I hope you'll finish your story cause it has potential.
Angel004

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