AUTHOR: JINEULCHUL STORY TITLE: IT'S THIS WAY.

Title (00/10): You’re title is kind of bland. It’s not very eye catching at all.

Characterization (00/10): You’re not really making any characterization. I understand that there are only two chapters so far but there is no real development of the character. You don’t give any background on Hoseok like who he is, where he came from, where his parents are, etc. This really degrades him as a main character because there’s no meat on the character that the readers can leave with an impression of being intrigued. As for Jimin, he’s supposed to be a main character right? The way you’re describing him is incredibly like a minor character. He repeatedly does the same thing over and over again just like a minor character does. I would give him more “screen time” like switching povs to him and then switching back to Hoseok.

Themes (10/10): I think you incorporated the violence theme well so far. I do advise that you gradually go into the “” part and don’t rush it too much. This is probably going to be one of those mature stories you write, right?

Setting (1/10): There is like practically no setting. You don’t seem to describe the setting around the two characters at all. Remember a setting practically sets the whole mood of the story and without it the story gets bland and washed out.

Description and Foreword (5/10): I am not a fan of the description. It’s too simple and way too short. It seems intriguing but it doesn’t say “Hey come here and read my story!” It’s more of a “Look at my story if you feel like it.”

Writing Style / Techniques (10/10): Honestly your style is very refined. It’s consistent which is refreshing and you seem to know what you want to write about. Do you have a beta reader because I could seem to find any grammatical mistakes?

Presentation (8/10): Your presentation is nice and neat. The type seems to be the same font and size which is important when it comes to being able to read it. One biggie I have is there is no graphics. Graphics are important because they are what lure people despite the saying of “You can’t judge a book by its cover”

Structure and Flow (5/10): Your flow is a bit choppy at the beginning. It didn’t feel like you were writing a story but more like you were listing a series of events. You were moving too quickly and then you seem to jump your readers on Chapter 2. Step back from your story a little and take an objective outlook on it. Ask yourself “Are my readers understanding what I’m writing?”, “Am I going too fast?” etc.

Plot (10/10): I’ve read many stories before but I have not yet to find a plot like this which is why I gave you full points. It’s definitely unique in its own way and does have its charm once you begin to actually read.

Overall Enjoyment (10/10): I enjoyed the story. I hope you intend to finish this one unlike your other stories ;D

Overall Score: 59/100
Overall Percentage: 59%
Reviewer's Note: You need to beef up your characters and watch your flow.
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