AUTHOR: PenguinLOvers772 STORY TITLE: A Remedy To The Broken Soul.

Title (08/10): I took off two points because well the title really gives away the plot.

Characterization (08/10): You gave Suhyun too much of an emphasis as her being a flat character. She’s not much of a character so going really into detail is a bit pointless. I also wish you would put more emphasis on Seungri’s character seeing how important he is to the plot.

Themes (10/10): I think you did an excellent job at representing depression. You gave the audience a point of view for them to be able to feel the character’s point of view.

Setting (00/10): You don’t really have a setting and I really can’t review something that doesn’t have it.

Description and Foreword (09/10): I think the description is rather misleading honestly because you really just barely graze over Suhyun’s character. Yet I would still keep it. Your foreword is strangely laid out.

Writing Style / Techniques (08/10): You have way too many spaces between the paragraphs. It gave me a bit of a head ache trying to keep my focus on the story and be interrupted by this giant space. The beginning author was not really necessary. You stated it once so you don’t really need to repeat it. If your reader didn’t read, it’s not your fault. Your grammar is excellent and there are no misspellings which is always a plus for me.

Presentation (07/10): I think your poster really misrepresents the whole story. I think you should really just stick to Youngbae and Seungri. However the rest of the layout of the story was neat and orderly which was great.

Structure and Flow (10/10): You have an excellent flow. Nothing is rushed or going too slowly which is rare to find.

Plot (10/10): I loved the plot. It’s got a very unique touch to it and probably the best story I’ve read within its category. I can tell you really had put a great amount of time in effort into this piece and for that I must applaud you. I really respect and admire writers like you.

Overall Enjoyment (10/10): This story has struck a personal chord for me. I was stuck in the same situation as Youngbae when I was little so I know what it was like to be like that. I enjoyed it and may be a bit biased in the enjoyment. I think you did an excellent job at representing the reality of the story.

Overall Score: 80/100
Overall Percentage: 80%
Reviewer's Note: Other than emphasis and spacing I think you should have this story advertised. It’s a beautiful piece of work and I hope it gets the following that it deserves.
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