The Voice of Bloody Lies

Title: 10/10

I'm at a loss of words. The title is nowhere to be found in aff and you did a very great job! The capitalization is also perfect!

Description/Foreword: 20/20

PERFECT!! You didn't spoil too much and gave enough information for the readers to understand! Well done!

Plot: 9/10

PERFECT but I had to take one mark away only because I've read a story simliar to this before. But don't worry because I'm sure you got this on your head without reading that story I read. I know you made the plot yourself and tried your best to make it perfect. Therefore, I apologize for taking one mark away :(  Please don't kill me ;-;

Language*: 29/30

The first time I read it, I couldn't find any mistakes at all. I was super frustrated because I couldn't find any mistakes after reading it twice so I kept on reading it carefully, scanning for mistakes. And I finally found some lmao XD However you need not worrying, they're just minor mistakes and it doesn't really affects the story very much. You only have little problems in vocabluaries. You used simple words for some when there are tons of other words you can use. For example, you typed "Taehyung was happy since it was his birthday party......" In this part, you could've used 'delighted' or 'elated'' instead of 'happy'. Oh cmon, we're all no longer in primary school right? These kind of words aren't supposed to be used here. But don't worry because it didn't really affect the story, it was just too plain and simple. You should've used more beautiful vocabularies. Anways, you did well on the rest :)

Originality: 9/10

I've seen these kind of plot somewhere but yeah, this is still different than what I see. The way you wrote it was very beautiful, and you gave some touches to it which made it obvious that you wrote a different thing from the others. Great job!

Flow: 10/10

You have the perfect flow so far. Not too slow, not too fast. Keep this pace up!^^

Characters development:  7/10

Since it is just the first chapter, I could understand that you haven't start developing the characters really well. I was confused with the identities of some, but I managed to figure it out after re-reading the chapter again. So far, well done^^

FINAL: 94/100

Reviewer's comment:

Your writing is just ... beautiful..♥ Congratulations on achieving 94!! >< 

*Language refers to punctutaion, paragraphing, grammar, etc.