Title: 10/10

Definitely a superb job! The title is super eye-catching, and I started to understand why you chose that as your title. Well done :)

Description/Foreword: 19/20

Your description is really asdfghjkl I can't even desccribe it with words. Just.. too.. wonderful. You succeded in summarazing everything into two sentences only, yet not spilling the plot too much. This is just wonderful.

For your foreword, it's just as wonderful as your description. The sentences you wrote there told me about the story, yet not spilling too much. Fantastic. However, when writing, you should use 'six' instead of the number itself, '6'. I don't even know why English created that rule. But oh, whatever. Aside from that, perfect.

Plot: 10/10

GOSH I CANT EVEN. CAN YOU PLEASE SLAP ME.

Language*: 29/30

There aren't major mistakes AT ALL. Like literally, all of your mistakes are minor mistakes, and it doesn't affect the story that much. It's just that sometimes you switch tenses from present to past and back to present. Also, your vocabulary is a liiiiiitle bit too uhmm.. well, I don't know how to say this. You could've used more descriptive words to describe the scene, and I think that would be better :D

Originality: 10/10

Never saw a storyline like this before, so great job!

Flow: 8/10

I think it's just right, but sometimes it's a little too fast. Just that, and the rest are done smoothly ^^

Characters development:  10/10

Well done! You described Kyungsoo's character including the minute details, as well as Kai's too. I really love how you did this, it's just wonderful!

FINAL: 96/100

Reviewer's comment:

My oh my. I'm not a big fan of fanfics but this is definitely an exception! Also, I'm super sorry for the late review ;-; I love you, and I'm subscribing to your fanfic because I just can't asdfghjkl I need to continue reading! <3

-chanteks

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