Les Fleurs du Mal by Moony_Kat
VᴇʀꜱᴀEᴍᴇʀɢᴇ ʀᴇᴠɪᴇᴡ ꜱʜᴏᴘ。 — busy!
title [5/5]
The title is pretty eye-catching right off the bat. While I did have to google the meaning behind it, I do think the title can fit the story well. Especially since it's a historical AU story. I feel like these kind of titles always fit historical stories, just because of the fact that the world in these is different and usually more 'beautiful' (how to explain this, oof. I'm trying my best HAHAH).
description/foreword [9/10]
For what it is, I think the description is pretty good. With most historical au stories I see, there is usually a war going on since that's pretty normal. Not only that but it seems like she also has another war of love going on. I think the story sounds interesting.
As for the foreword, I tihnk it's pretty good. It gives a small preview to the story and asked questions to make the readers engage with the story, make them think about what the possible outcome could be.
plot [45/50]
Like all chaptered stories, I'm not going to read all of the chapters. That's just a bit of an FYI. Plus, I'm already behind on doing this review so I hope you don't mind, but if something I say changes later in the story where I haven't read, feel free to correct me.
I've been given a few different historical AU stories and I do feel like a lot of them can have the same kind of plot, per se, and it really depends on how it's written. I do think you wrote yours in a way that differentiates from the other ones.
Though, to be honest, I feel like the exact plot/problem isn't very clear from where I stopped reading. I honestly only went up to chapter 5 or 6, I can't remember, so obviously there's not much for me to input here. I do know that it will most likely involve war and, of course, some type of romance since... pretty much every story does at this point. Plus, with slower stories, it takes longer to find a plot because the story moves at a more steady pace.
Overall, I think your plot is pretty good so far from where I've stopped. Stories like these just take time when it comes to coming close to a or even an ending.
writing style/flow [18/20]
There weren't really any grammar issues, though in the beginning of CH 2., I did find a sentence that was a little oddly worded.
"Would I scared her away into disappearing if I'd go to her?"
Scared should be 'scare', and instead of saying 'I'd go', I would put 'I went', just because it sounds strange the way it is.
"Would I scare her away into disappearing if I went to her?"
Just sounds better overall.
Other than that, the writing style is as it should be for a story such as this one. With historical AU's, I feel like the writing is always more proper sounding and yours definitely does sound quite proper. Nothing wrong with the writing style at all.
As for the flow, well, it is a slower paced story. So the flow is as it should be, in my opinion. I don't think anything is moving too fast nor TOO slow so I think you're set in this area.
characterization [10/10]
Honestly the characterization is very good in this story, each character has their own story and the readers get to know them throughout the chapters. I'm not going to go extensively into each character (not that there are many to go off of so far) but so far, especially the main character Sunji and Jungkook, so I think you're headed in the right direction so far.
personal enjoyment [3/5]
Historical AU's really aren't my thing and I don't know if it's because I'm tired or because I'm always confused (maybe both) but I did have to reread a few things twice to really understand it (that's really on me though, not you lOL) because historical AU's have a lot more terms in them and such that make it hard to follow for me. But if you want me to be honest, the story is well written and I can tell a lot of thought went into it. Since I'm personally not a fan of historical au's and I'm also not a fan of slower paced stories, mainly because I have the attention span of a donkey, but I think you did a good job with writing the story. It looks pretty good but just isn't for me personally.
total of [90/100]
others: I don't know why but I had a really hard time trying to do this review, like... I don't know. That's why I'm pretty late on this compared to other reviews. So sorry for the later review on that. It's not the best review I've done, I'll admit, but I've been struggling quite a bit. I hope it's helpful in some way though!
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