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Review by xoxokai

Title [9/10]

I don't know what 'PMS' means, although I still love the involvement of the phrase 'a tale' and the word chocolates. I can say that it didn't captured me at first, but other than that, it's still a better title.

Appearance [9/10]

Omg. You could have at least requested a poster for this, because the current photo is so tempting!

Description and foreword [7/10]

I don't understand the description given on your story, especially on 'anyone that you can imagine of' part. It could have been OR since your talking about the bias, and it's singular, not plural. Foreword us fine, totally romantic in it's own way.

Characters [9/10]

I think it's brilliantly projected, since the character has a major persona to play with, and since it talks about periods. Girls can relate to it.

Plot [30/40]

I don't know if it is categorized as a storyline since it felt like it's an IMAGINE rather than a fanfic. And, I'm not even sure if I'll consider it being original due to the same reason that it's more of an IMAGINE.

Grammar and spelling [5/10]

Things you would/should consider next time:

1. Be careful on using -ed, especially when words are being portrayed in the present. Suffixes such as -ed are used only if the word or the statement is being described in the PAST, or currently known as PAST TENSE.

** google this subject, please.

2. We use "a" when we talk about a single subject. It goes with "an," which talks in singular subjects, too, although it's only used as an alternative to "a" when the the next word that follows starts with a vowel.

Overall enjoyment [10/10]

Other than the issues I had, it's still enjoyable and it surprises me on how the vocabularies kicked in! Well done!

Total [79/100]