Zellodiez

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Review by MeowX

Title [9/10]

There are a few stories with this title... but it relates very well to the story!

Appearance [10/10]

The poster is really captivating i would say. Appearance wise, you did a good job!^^

Description and Foreword [8/10]

You gave out the right amount of information, enough to spark the interest of the readers. I was really interested to find out about what would happen next too~

Characters [8/10]

Lerie Reyes is well... Matured. It's good that you kept her personality and such constant!
Ria is a typical fangirl, and the way she acts is totally understandable. But it would be nice to know how Ria and Himchan skype with each other despite the language barrier. Like do they talk, or do they just giggle all the way..

Plot [33/40]

Fairly original plot, but if they are idols in this fic, there would be fans following them everywhere. They would not cheer when Yongguk announced that the special girl was Lerie... And when the security yelled out Youngjae's name, the fans would have chased after him.
So well, i feel that it has to be a little more realistic.

Grammar and spelling [6/10]

I do not see much spelling mistakes except for those in which you wrote in romanization. but here are some of the grammatical errors.

Prologue | declared [that it was] too embarrassing

Chapter 1 | black hair [which fell onto her shoulders

Chapter 2(this is more like a wrong use of vocab) | It is supposed to be Busan Accent. Not Dialect

Chapter 6 | the home of k-pop [artistes were] bound to [be the place where most fans hang around].

Chapter 8 | [but] when she saw [that] Yongguk was absent,

Chapter 9 | "He can't [be] that ugly[,] can he?"

Chapter 10 | he started [singing] the next few verses.