Can you be my partner...?

A thousand Cranes and Ice-Cream (Long Hiatius)

 

 

Yenji’s P.O.V

 

I couldn’t recognize who it was so I raised both of my hands up and started hitting him like my life depended on it , well maybe it was , because I was about to get kidnapped or even worse.

“GO AWAY YOU E, I’M TO YOUNG!!! SOMEBODY HELP I’M ABOUT TO GET RAP-” But before I could finish a hand covered my mouth which made me stop. 

 

“GOSH how loud and weird can you get?” A familiar and irritated voice said , he pulled down his mask. When I recognized who it was I got very pissed and just pushed him , walking past him.

 

“Loser” I muttered under my breathe. 

 

“I heard that you know I was just trying to help you geez,next-”He didn’t finish his sentence because I didn’t want to hear him so I just ran off.

 

Daehyuns P.O.V

 

I was just talking to her , but as soon as I looked up from the ground she disappeared *She’s fast..” I thought. 

I walked back to Yongguk’s house, while I was walking back I was thinking if I should come over or not because I was still a bit mad at him.

 

When I finally arrived at Yongguk’s I had made my mind up already, I should go in since they were worried. I knocked on the door and less then a blink of an eye the door opened up , right in front of my eye there stood Yongguk and the rest of the members standing there with a worried look but when I glanced back at Yongguk he gave me a ‘Where-did-you-go-look’

 

“Hi, to you too” I said and invited my self in his house.

 

“Why did you run off like that?” Yongguk asked in a deep scary voice

 

“Well, you insulted me!I told you I needed it very bad!”I sulked

 

“Gee, and I thought I was immature..” Zelo mumbled to himself while rolling his eyes

 

“I will buy you a smoothie tomorrow then” Yongguk said and sighed.

 

                                                ~The next day~

~Yenji’s P.O.V~

 

I was on my way to my first lesson when I heard the principle's voice on the school’s speakers “Attention everyone tomorrow night will be my birthday and I decided to make a ball and invite everyone in school to the ball!You would need a partner for the ball because we will be doing partner stuff at the ball!The ball starts at 6:00 pm”The principle announced I sighed *I think would go to the ball alone then*I thought with a frown.

 

With that I walked to my first lesson, but on the way to class I met the girl that said she was Daehyun’s ‘girlfriend’

 

 “Tomorrow night is the principals ball I wonder if you have a partner..wait you’re a loner and no one wants to be your partner AHAHA”She said and laughed liked a pig

 

“Tsk, tsk who’s your partner then? You think I won’t have a partner? Trust me I’ll have a partner” I said back at her and chuckled to myself.

 

“I would like to see you have one”With that she walk away making sure she bumped on my right shoulder.

 

*(sigh) What did I just say?Me and my big mouth* I thought as I walked to my first lesson.

 

The day went by very fast, I was walking my way to the cafeteria to buy lunch when suddenly a guy with a mask on dragged me to an empty room, the guy looked familiar , but I couldn’t really tell who it was , because half of his face was covered by the black mask.

 

He started to walk towards me, I made eye contact with him, his eyes looked so scary and serious which made me scared so I walked back , but then after 5-6 steps back , my back hit the wall *Damn it* I cursed in my head trying to not say it out loud.

 

I closed my eyes and getting ready to shout for help, I took a deep so I can scream really ‘loud’ “HELP!THERE IS A-”Before I could finish my sentence the guy covered my mouth, but I was to scared to open my eye’s thinking that my life would end if I open it.

But then....

 

......

 

 

after a couple of minutes he said something that I thought no one would say...

 

.....

 

“Would you be my partner for the ball?”He said as he took his hands away from my mouth.

 

I opened my eyes in shock...

 

 

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Hihihi guys~!

I hope you like this chapter! 

azn_buty write it! And I edited it! (hope my editing skills aren't bad...)

The next chapter is going to be written by me~ 

Love you guys~! <3 :D ^^

-saranghae0_0

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kpop_luver29 #1
Chapter 13: AHhhaahahha, getting back at daehyun?LOL
can't wait till the next update>.< Who's the people who are draging yenji?Update the next chapter I want to find out who it is^^and i'm new to aff
exo_tic29 #2
Chapter 12: Ahahaha, Daehyunie is so funny, looking at his watch that is not on his wrist bhahahhahaha!Ahhh, you authors are so funny.
And Himchan being a _______....?whoa he sounds like he went a bit far LOL!~can't wait till the next update FIGHTING
chooseme #3
awesome.. ^^
B2utyful-Elf #4
Chapter 3: WAAAHH!! >_< you guys are so cute; I didn't know you always celebrate when people comment or subscribe =) I might start doing that too, sounds fun ^^ Anyway, I was surprised about the trash talk in this chapter (you know, using bad words) It's your choice to use them, but please don't use them very often although I understand that some bad words really help express feelings. Sorry I had to say that, but I still love your story! I'll find time to read again! =) Keep it up!
kpop_fan4 #5
Chapter 8: please update soon author nim
nikki_jay #6
OMG, i love your story update soon author nim this is an amazing story!!!
B2utyful-Elf #7
Chapter 2: Hey there! =) I've had time once again >_< !! saranghae0_0 you did well hehe^^ Some freaky girl coming up and claiming crazy things? If I were DaeHyun I would be all like "NO COMMENT" ^o^ I'll try to read more than one chapter next time! Keep it up! I'm looking forward to the next chapters and great teamwork between azn_buty and saranghae0_0 ~
B2utyful-Elf #8
Chapter 1: I've only had time to read the first chapter so I can only say this much: Hahaha! ^^ My Jong Up Oppa as a meanie? How cute is thaaaattt!! >_< Please continue on, I'll read the next chapters when I'm free again! ^^
KikisxD
#10
Chapter 2: I've read it and I'm going to quickly review it~ (**not an AFF Reviewer, this is merely my opinion as a writer myself.)

Okay so, first I notice some minor grammar mistakes, such as commas. When doing a comma, you tend to do this: "...piss her parents off ,she helps her mother... (etc)" but the comma should be like this: "...piss her parents off, she helps her mother...(etc)". Ensure you correct this maybe. It's not a big deal of course; still understandable. You don't do it everywhere, so before you post the chapter next time, you should quickly go over it to make sure you haven't done it~~ ^.^

Another note is that sometimes you use commas instead of full stops (I sometimes do this too but I'm trying to stop this habit hehe) or put in full stops without a space . Once again, this is just a case of checking over~~ Just go over it; make sure you've added the spaces and read each sentence; make sure it's the best-fitting punctuation. ^.^

Another main thing I've noticed is that when two people speak, you leave them on the same paragraph. For some readers (and myself), this was a little confusing but manageable. Whenever a new person speaks a new paragraph is made. E.G...

>>> "Hello Oppa!" I grinned, running through the corridor where my husband waited.
"Please don't," he began, teary-eyed. My heart skipped a beat and I felt faint all of a sudden. "I have bad news..." he barely whispered. <<<

BUT, even then... it's up to you whether you decide to put a space between each miniature paragraph or not. I tend not to, others do~ ^.^

Another is that sometimes you shorten words into slang which isn't the best thing to do, especially when typing a fanfic... so, for example, you typed "coz" and it should technically become "'cause", with the dash, showing it's shortened.

Well, I won't continue... I hope I haven't disheartened any of you both! I also write a story with a co-author and it's fun conjoining two styles!

Good Luck!