Tripping~

A thousand Cranes and Ice-Cream (Long Hiatius)

 

   by:azn_buty

1 Minute, 1 Second (feat. Taru) - Epik High

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TzW9uwfSMv4

 

 

Yenji's  P.O.V

 

 

"Ohkay...that was kind of weird..."I whispered to my self quietly and walked away so I could be alone *This is what happens when I'm around people...these types of things always happen. arhhhh!!*I thought,but before I could open the door to go inside I felt a hand wrap around my wrist, it was warm and cozy. It felt like I had touched this hand before , but before I could figure out who it was, a voice suddenly interrupted “Hey, do you want to eat recess with me and discuss about-”before he could finish I ran away from him.

*Hell no I’m not going to eat with you when something like just then happened...If I eat with you I can’t even imagine whats going to happen next* I thought, shook my head and kept on running but being my clumsy self I tripped and fell on top of someone that looked really familiar.

“Watch where you’re going orphan , why don’t you just go and buy a new pair of eyes so you can see , since the eyes that you are using right now don’t like you.Wait. I forgot the fact that you’re too poor ” She said, flicking her hair laughing, her other friends laughed along and walked pass me making sure they bumped their shoulders onto my shoulders.

 

But before they could leave , I quickly kicked the girl who had said those hurtful things to me and imitated her annoying laughing voice and walked away...

 

Soon it was the end of recess, which means I have maths lesson next. I loved doing maths , so basically it’s my favorite subject

 

I walked into the room , but before I could get to my seat , I tripped again (WTF)! I looked up to see the school’s queenka , Goo Hara , “Hey , Watch where you’re going you! I almost broke my foot you fat a*s” She said in a mean tone.

“Sorry, but I wasn’t the one who put my foot out like I’m doing some retarded foot dance...”I answered back , my eyes glaring at her scarily.

”YOU’LL REGRET SAYING THAT TO ME!!!”She screamed which made everyone’s attention on us. “

What ever...you say...”I answered slowly and walked to my spot.

 

The rest of the day went by very fast , maybe because today I didn’t really get teased that much anyways that’s a good thing. I sighed and went out of the school and went my way to work,I was enjoying the beautiful scene of Seoul when I fell down and scraped my knee “AHHH”I screamed in pain. 

“Dude,chill I can help you” An unknown voice said, but when I looked up to see who it is the guy was wearing a MASK O.O (My D.O face again)

 

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Note from azn_buty:

 

Hi,guy’s so what do you think?Sorry if it’s not interesting but I did tried alot on this chapter:) and credit to saranghae0_0 for editing this chapter^^ please COMMENT on what you think<3!~ and lastly I love you people who subscribe our story thank you it means alot to us!!!!<3

 

 

Herro Everyone~

I hope you guys like the 3rd chapter~ azn_buty wrote it~

I hope I didn't pass any mistakes while editing.........O.O

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kpop_luver29 #1
Chapter 13: AHhhaahahha, getting back at daehyun?LOL
can't wait till the next update>.< Who's the people who are draging yenji?Update the next chapter I want to find out who it is^^and i'm new to aff
exo_tic29 #2
Chapter 12: Ahahaha, Daehyunie is so funny, looking at his watch that is not on his wrist bhahahhahaha!Ahhh, you authors are so funny.
And Himchan being a _______....?whoa he sounds like he went a bit far LOL!~can't wait till the next update FIGHTING
chooseme #3
awesome.. ^^
B2utyful-Elf #4
Chapter 3: WAAAHH!! >_< you guys are so cute; I didn't know you always celebrate when people comment or subscribe =) I might start doing that too, sounds fun ^^ Anyway, I was surprised about the trash talk in this chapter (you know, using bad words) It's your choice to use them, but please don't use them very often although I understand that some bad words really help express feelings. Sorry I had to say that, but I still love your story! I'll find time to read again! =) Keep it up!
kpop_fan4 #5
Chapter 8: please update soon author nim
nikki_jay #6
OMG, i love your story update soon author nim this is an amazing story!!!
B2utyful-Elf #7
Chapter 2: Hey there! =) I've had time once again >_< !! saranghae0_0 you did well hehe^^ Some freaky girl coming up and claiming crazy things? If I were DaeHyun I would be all like "NO COMMENT" ^o^ I'll try to read more than one chapter next time! Keep it up! I'm looking forward to the next chapters and great teamwork between azn_buty and saranghae0_0 ~
B2utyful-Elf #8
Chapter 1: I've only had time to read the first chapter so I can only say this much: Hahaha! ^^ My Jong Up Oppa as a meanie? How cute is thaaaattt!! >_< Please continue on, I'll read the next chapters when I'm free again! ^^
ChibiMusicStar #9
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Sorry for taking your space
KikisxD #10
Chapter 2: I've read it and I'm going to quickly review it~ (**not an AFF Reviewer, this is merely my opinion as a writer myself.)

Okay so, first I notice some minor grammar mistakes, such as commas. When doing a comma, you tend to do this: "...piss her parents off ,she helps her mother... (etc)" but the comma should be like this: "...piss her parents off, she helps her mother...(etc)". Ensure you correct this maybe. It's not a big deal of course; still understandable. You don't do it everywhere, so before you post the chapter next time, you should quickly go over it to make sure you haven't done it~~ ^.^

Another note is that sometimes you use commas instead of full stops (I sometimes do this too but I'm trying to stop this habit hehe) or put in full stops without a space . Once again, this is just a case of checking over~~ Just go over it; make sure you've added the spaces and read each sentence; make sure it's the best-fitting punctuation. ^.^

Another main thing I've noticed is that when two people speak, you leave them on the same paragraph. For some readers (and myself), this was a little confusing but manageable. Whenever a new person speaks a new paragraph is made. E.G...

>>> "Hello Oppa!" I grinned, running through the corridor where my husband waited.
"Please don't," he began, teary-eyed. My heart skipped a beat and I felt faint all of a sudden. "I have bad news..." he barely whispered. <<<

BUT, even then... it's up to you whether you decide to put a space between each miniature paragraph or not. I tend not to, others do~ ^.^

Another is that sometimes you shorten words into slang which isn't the best thing to do, especially when typing a fanfic... so, for example, you typed "coz" and it should technically become "'cause", with the dash, showing it's shortened.

Well, I won't continue... I hope I haven't disheartened any of you both! I also write a story with a co-author and it's fun conjoining two styles!

Good Luck!
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