Beautiful

A thousand Cranes and Ice-Cream (Long Hiatius)

 

Yenji’s P.O.V

 

“What’s happening?! ” I said in a panicky tone

 

“I don’t know , maybe you kneed so hard that it shook and broke this car” Daehyun replied jokingly , sticking his tongue out

 

We walked out of the limo to inspect what had happened , it turned out that we had been involved in a crash , but it was just minor , so there were no injuries...

The driver told us to go , so that he could sort it out.. and we definitely had to go.. WE WERE LATE!

 

 

We ran to Seohyun’s house as fast as we could. *Kkekeke I didn’t forget to make Daehyun hold the heavy bags we had brought :P*

 

When we got there we were tired out of our minds.. 

 

Seohyun whisked me away into her room so that she could do the preparation quickly.

 

 

 

Seohyun’s P.O.V

 

When Yenji and Daehyun came , their faces were all red and they were perspiring heavily... they seemed REALLY tired...

 

I quickly rushed Yenji to my room where I made her have a very quick shower..

 

 

Yenji’s P.O.V

 

The moment I walked out of the shower , the she was , standing with a brush in one hand and eyeshadow in the other..

 

Before I knew it... I felt a brush on my eye and something gliding over my lips (lipstick) . 

I looked at the mirror and it was a whole new person before my eyes.. was that me..? I never knew that I could look this... this.. pretty..

 

Seohyun didn’t say anything until I slipped into my dress..

 

 

Seohyun’s P.O.V

 

I looked into the bag that they had brought... and to my surprise there were no shoes!

 

“Where are the shoes.. Yenji...?” I asked anxiously 

 

“Huh?What do you mean..?” she answered smoothly

 

“I mean the shoes that you were supposed to bring” I barked back (maybe too loud.... I wasn’t trying to be mean.. I was panicking.. this could ruin everything..)

 

“I thought they were in the bag...” Yenji said suddenly breaking my thoughts

 

“No they’re not there , but maybe you can fit into my shoes , since you fit into my dress..” I uttered

 

“Ok then..” Yenji replied softly

 

(Meanwhile........)

 

Daehyun’s P.O.V

 

I looked at my arm at the watch that was not there at all..

Even if I don’t have a watch.. I know that we’re going to be late..

 

What’s taking them so long.?!

Urghh

 

 

Yenji’s P.O.V

 

I tried on a few of Seohyun’s shoes... but they were too big for me... and that’s when one of the shoes caught my eye.. it was one of those things that I wanted , but didn’t have money to buy..

 

“Seohyun...can I take a look at that shoe..?”

 

“Alright then..” she said  “ooo! That shoe will go very well with your dress ” she then added after she had gotten it off the shelf

 

I tried it on and it fit like a glove..... *Was this shoe destined for me?! omo*

 

“Ahh good.. Now spin” Seohyun told me and I obeyed.

 

“You’re beautiful Yenji..” she told me as I tried to pull in a compliment without arguing or saying are you sure..?

 

“Quick go! You’re late!” she shouted out of blue pushing me out of my compliment trance..

 

------------------------------------------ At the Ball~^^ 

 

No-one’s P.O.V

 

She walked down the stairs beautifully.. daintily stepping down and down , it would be weird just focusing on one person walking down a few stairs.. but no-one complained , as she was obviously the mot beautiful person of the ball..

 

All eyes were on her..

 

 

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Herro Guise~ :3

*Waves*

I hope that you like the chapter that I wrote ^_^

I tried.. >.< Hopefully it's alright..

*Drinks Tea..* 

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(Chapter written/edited by saranghae0_0)

 

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kpop_luver29 #1
Chapter 13: AHhhaahahha, getting back at daehyun?LOL
can't wait till the next update>.< Who's the people who are draging yenji?Update the next chapter I want to find out who it is^^and i'm new to aff
exo_tic29 #2
Chapter 12: Ahahaha, Daehyunie is so funny, looking at his watch that is not on his wrist bhahahhahaha!Ahhh, you authors are so funny.
And Himchan being a _______....?whoa he sounds like he went a bit far LOL!~can't wait till the next update FIGHTING
chooseme #3
awesome.. ^^
B2utyful-Elf #4
Chapter 3: WAAAHH!! >_< you guys are so cute; I didn't know you always celebrate when people comment or subscribe =) I might start doing that too, sounds fun ^^ Anyway, I was surprised about the trash talk in this chapter (you know, using bad words) It's your choice to use them, but please don't use them very often although I understand that some bad words really help express feelings. Sorry I had to say that, but I still love your story! I'll find time to read again! =) Keep it up!
kpop_fan4 #5
Chapter 8: please update soon author nim
nikki_jay #6
OMG, i love your story update soon author nim this is an amazing story!!!
B2utyful-Elf #7
Chapter 2: Hey there! =) I've had time once again >_< !! saranghae0_0 you did well hehe^^ Some freaky girl coming up and claiming crazy things? If I were DaeHyun I would be all like "NO COMMENT" ^o^ I'll try to read more than one chapter next time! Keep it up! I'm looking forward to the next chapters and great teamwork between azn_buty and saranghae0_0 ~
B2utyful-Elf #8
Chapter 1: I've only had time to read the first chapter so I can only say this much: Hahaha! ^^ My Jong Up Oppa as a meanie? How cute is thaaaattt!! >_< Please continue on, I'll read the next chapters when I'm free again! ^^
KikisxD
#10
Chapter 2: I've read it and I'm going to quickly review it~ (**not an AFF Reviewer, this is merely my opinion as a writer myself.)

Okay so, first I notice some minor grammar mistakes, such as commas. When doing a comma, you tend to do this: "...piss her parents off ,she helps her mother... (etc)" but the comma should be like this: "...piss her parents off, she helps her mother...(etc)". Ensure you correct this maybe. It's not a big deal of course; still understandable. You don't do it everywhere, so before you post the chapter next time, you should quickly go over it to make sure you haven't done it~~ ^.^

Another note is that sometimes you use commas instead of full stops (I sometimes do this too but I'm trying to stop this habit hehe) or put in full stops without a space . Once again, this is just a case of checking over~~ Just go over it; make sure you've added the spaces and read each sentence; make sure it's the best-fitting punctuation. ^.^

Another main thing I've noticed is that when two people speak, you leave them on the same paragraph. For some readers (and myself), this was a little confusing but manageable. Whenever a new person speaks a new paragraph is made. E.G...

>>> "Hello Oppa!" I grinned, running through the corridor where my husband waited.
"Please don't," he began, teary-eyed. My heart skipped a beat and I felt faint all of a sudden. "I have bad news..." he barely whispered. <<<

BUT, even then... it's up to you whether you decide to put a space between each miniature paragraph or not. I tend not to, others do~ ^.^

Another is that sometimes you shorten words into slang which isn't the best thing to do, especially when typing a fanfic... so, for example, you typed "coz" and it should technically become "'cause", with the dash, showing it's shortened.

Well, I won't continue... I hope I haven't disheartened any of you both! I also write a story with a co-author and it's fun conjoining two styles!

Good Luck!