meeting B.A.P^^

A thousand Cranes and Ice-Cream (Long Hiatius)

 

------------------------------------------ At the Ball~^^ 

 

No-one’s P.O.V

 

She walked down the stairs beautifully.. daintily stepping down and down , it would be weird just focusing on one person walking down a few stairs.. but no-one complained , as she was obviously the mot beautiful person of the ball..

 

All eyes were on her..

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But their was one person who didn't take his eyes off her during the ride to the ball….

 

It was no one els but Jung Daehyun, he admired how milky and smooth your legs were.He wanted to touch your white milky long legs but was afraid that you might get freaked out, but your face was the one that he thought was the best.You had light make up on, you didn't have your make up like those girls who look like barbie dolls.

 

Daehyun was in his own little world when suddenly somebody wrapped their arms around him "Daehyunie oppa, you look so handsome today"A familiar voice whispered in Daehyun's ear.

 

He turned around to see no other then the psycho girl from the roof top last time *What was her name again?umm, soohyun..?sooyook..?seohyun?wait what the hell..?thats Yonggook's sister's name…um oh yeah…Sooyoung*, "Oh hey Sooyoung thank you, you look…" he looked at her face and got a bit freaked out…she looked exactly like a barbie doll or worse."…nice…."He finished.

 

[A/N:I don't hate Sooyoung, I actually really love her but we needed a bad person in this story:(]

 

Daehyun then realise you were missing, he then put his hands in his pocket to search for his phone but then remembered that he never got your number..

 

He ran and ran like their was no tomorrow, he then saw you standing next to Yongguk *Since when were they so close?*Daehyun thought and sighed dramatically, he bit the bottom of his lip and rolled his eyes.He walked up to the both of you's

 

Your P.O.V

 

I was walking around looking for that sooyoung girl.

 

"You look different today"A deep familiar voice whispered "But…in a good way" He finish.

 

I turned around to see no other then yongguk, he had a very manly smirk on but he looked very hot in the suit he's wearing.I was very surprise to see him…*Wait don't tell me he…goes to the same school…*I thought and my jaws dropped I face palmed myself.

 

Yongguk gave me a weird look so I gave him an even weirder look "You go to this school as well?"I asked "Yep~"He answered like he was proud while poping the 'P'.

 

"What are you to doing together?"Daehyun asked "I never new you two were this close"Daehyun gave ugly us looks, I shot back an even more uglier look. "Anyways, Hyung, where are the others?"

 

"Here" 4 hot guys said in unison.

 

"Oh, ok then, guys this is my partner Jang Yenji" Daehyun said "Yenji these are my fr-"

 

Jongup cut him off "Hi, do you still remember me?I'm in your class, you look very beautiful tonight"Jongup smiled, it wasn't a normal smile.It was rather a flirting smile, but of course he wasn't in love , Daehyun gave him a dirty look.

 

"Hey, don't try to hit on her.You already have that kara or hardar girl what ever her name is"Daehyun glared while saying it, he said it in a very mean tone but tried not to glare to much.

 

I was looking at all 4 of the boys face, they all had blonde hair including Yongguk and Daehyun.But they look very cute and y, one of them looked very young and has a smile that all girls would give up anything for him, one was very handsome well that was Jongup, the other one had a rather cute nose like Yang Yoseop from B2ST and the last one he had a cocky but cute smile.

 

"Hello Noona, your very pretty.I hope Daehyun hung doesn't bully you like he bullies me"The cocky smile boy said.

 

"How old are you?"I asked, I was pretty surprise on why he called me noon when I don't know his age nor does he know my age…well maybe he called me noon because i'm Daehyun's partner and he might of thought we're in the same class which we are…

 

"I'm 15"He saluted, he then started looking at a something but couldn't take off his eye's off it, I looked at the direction he looked at and he was staring a very cute girl.She didn't wear those dresses that are ty but rather cute.

 

I smirked "Aww, your growing up so fast, I hope you don't be naughty and do what gown ups do…", I heard light chuckles next to me ears

 

"He won't do it but we should do it babe~"The young looking said, my face went paled. I took a big step away from him, then another, then another and ran to Daehyun.

 

"Um, can you tell introduce them to me?"I asked since I don't know their names yet.

 

"Sure"

 

"This is the maknae, Zelo" Daehyun said pointing to the bot who called me nooa.*Ahhh, so that's his name he's pretty polite* I thought and nodded my head.

 

"Anneyonghaseyo noona, Zelo iminda"

 

"Anneyonghaseyo Yenji-shi, Youngjae iminda, you can call me Youngjae oppa" Younjae bowed 90 degree and putted on a warm smile *Mmm, why is he so polite and formal for?*I thought

 

"No, need to be so formal"I said, "And plus your older then"

 

"Ah, ok"Youngjae nodded

 

"ANNEYONG, You know me all ready but you can call me Jongup oppa"Jongup winked, I chuckled a little *Why so loud?*

 

"Anneyong, I'm older then you, i'm guessing your 17?"The one that looked young said.

 

I bowed 90 degree "Ne"I answered

 

"I thought so, call me Himchan oppa"Himchan winked, I then notice he was checking me out and started poking my st…o…mach? *WHAT THE HELL?* I thought in my head, I may look calm but inside my head I would of killed him over 1000+ times *I'm going to let this one go because we just met but the next time… watch what your doing buddy*

 

"I'm so glad to meet you today oppas and dongsaeng's"I smiled, "You forgot about me kid"Yongguk yelled from the side.

 

"Call my oppa, since i'm the eldest here"Yongguk winked and gave me his gummy smile.I bowed 90 degrees.

 

"Jongup oppa, I was looking every where for you"A pretty girl walked up to Jongup *Must be Jongup's partner or girlfriend*

She then notice me presence and starred at me with questioning eye's.

 

I bowed 90 degree's "Anneyong, Yenji iminda.I'm Daehyun's partner tonight"I greeted.

 

She smiled, she then looked me up and down and then her eye's widened "Wait aren't you…."

 

*..the orphan…*I finished in my head, my smile fell I didn't need to wait till she finish I already know what she's gonna say "Yeah….I'm the orphan" I finished for her.

 

At that moment all the guys stared at me "….your an orphan?"They said in unison, at that moment I thought there was 6 D.O's because of how big their eye's went.They had pity in their eye's unlike other's they start to make fun of me, but I don't want to be pitied.I gave them a warm smile "So are you guys gonna make fun of me and stay away from me now?"I said.

 

"Noona, we have hearts you know, we will stick with you till then end no matter what.And I have a good feeling we will all get along with you well"Zelo grinned, he had a light smirk though. "Oh and if that didn't you feel better then…"He hugged so tight and said "SARANGHAE NOONA"

 

"Thanks for the love"I answered back feeling warmness on my chest, I then stared at Jongup's girlfriend, I could of swore she glared at me but I decided to shrug it off, but I might of just thought it though so yeah"Whats your name?"I asked her.

 

"Jeoneun Hara ieyo" She smiled and did a 90 degree bow.

(In most AFF stories not much authors use this word, so this means 'My name is ….')

 

"ATTENTION EVERYONE"The principal tried to get everyones attention "I hope everyone to night has a partner"He said while looking at everyone making sure people have partner's. "So the fist activity is to make a circle their…"He pointed to the middle of the dance floor, everyone started to make a circle their including me, hard and the boys.

 

"Everyone will be dancing their with their partner"The principal smiled, I could tell everyone thought it was easy and boring "BUT" he said making lots of weird faces…*Why is he so weird today?Do people get weird when they grow older?*I thought. "You have to make it interesting, cool and i think you should do some hip hop moves"He finished and started making robot movements with his arms but FAILED .

 

I looked at the boy's and now…they had their partner, Zelo and Jongup looked like they were very interested and up to it.

 

Then the lights turned off, it was all dark.I then felt somebody, more then 1 person pull me….

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Sorry if theirs ALOT of mistakes in this chapter coz I wanted to update this early since we updated chapter 12 very very very late hehe~

Do you want us to update every day? or do you want us to update 2 chapters each time we update?Coz once my internet problem is over I will be updating allot hehe!^^

 

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kpop_luver29 #1
Chapter 13: AHhhaahahha, getting back at daehyun?LOL
can't wait till the next update>.< Who's the people who are draging yenji?Update the next chapter I want to find out who it is^^and i'm new to aff
exo_tic29 #2
Chapter 12: Ahahaha, Daehyunie is so funny, looking at his watch that is not on his wrist bhahahhahaha!Ahhh, you authors are so funny.
And Himchan being a _______....?whoa he sounds like he went a bit far LOL!~can't wait till the next update FIGHTING
chooseme #3
awesome.. ^^
B2utyful-Elf #4
Chapter 3: WAAAHH!! >_< you guys are so cute; I didn't know you always celebrate when people comment or subscribe =) I might start doing that too, sounds fun ^^ Anyway, I was surprised about the trash talk in this chapter (you know, using bad words) It's your choice to use them, but please don't use them very often although I understand that some bad words really help express feelings. Sorry I had to say that, but I still love your story! I'll find time to read again! =) Keep it up!
kpop_fan4 #5
Chapter 8: please update soon author nim
nikki_jay #6
OMG, i love your story update soon author nim this is an amazing story!!!
B2utyful-Elf #7
Chapter 2: Hey there! =) I've had time once again >_< !! saranghae0_0 you did well hehe^^ Some freaky girl coming up and claiming crazy things? If I were DaeHyun I would be all like "NO COMMENT" ^o^ I'll try to read more than one chapter next time! Keep it up! I'm looking forward to the next chapters and great teamwork between azn_buty and saranghae0_0 ~
B2utyful-Elf #8
Chapter 1: I've only had time to read the first chapter so I can only say this much: Hahaha! ^^ My Jong Up Oppa as a meanie? How cute is thaaaattt!! >_< Please continue on, I'll read the next chapters when I'm free again! ^^
KikisxD
#10
Chapter 2: I've read it and I'm going to quickly review it~ (**not an AFF Reviewer, this is merely my opinion as a writer myself.)

Okay so, first I notice some minor grammar mistakes, such as commas. When doing a comma, you tend to do this: "...piss her parents off ,she helps her mother... (etc)" but the comma should be like this: "...piss her parents off, she helps her mother...(etc)". Ensure you correct this maybe. It's not a big deal of course; still understandable. You don't do it everywhere, so before you post the chapter next time, you should quickly go over it to make sure you haven't done it~~ ^.^

Another note is that sometimes you use commas instead of full stops (I sometimes do this too but I'm trying to stop this habit hehe) or put in full stops without a space . Once again, this is just a case of checking over~~ Just go over it; make sure you've added the spaces and read each sentence; make sure it's the best-fitting punctuation. ^.^

Another main thing I've noticed is that when two people speak, you leave them on the same paragraph. For some readers (and myself), this was a little confusing but manageable. Whenever a new person speaks a new paragraph is made. E.G...

>>> "Hello Oppa!" I grinned, running through the corridor where my husband waited.
"Please don't," he began, teary-eyed. My heart skipped a beat and I felt faint all of a sudden. "I have bad news..." he barely whispered. <<<

BUT, even then... it's up to you whether you decide to put a space between each miniature paragraph or not. I tend not to, others do~ ^.^

Another is that sometimes you shorten words into slang which isn't the best thing to do, especially when typing a fanfic... so, for example, you typed "coz" and it should technically become "'cause", with the dash, showing it's shortened.

Well, I won't continue... I hope I haven't disheartened any of you both! I also write a story with a co-author and it's fun conjoining two styles!

Good Luck!