The title strongly relates to the plot as 'This House' refers to the four siblings and 'Is Chaos' means that the four siblings muck around with each other and are consistently bickering.

The title is the opposite of cliche; it is unique. No other story has the same / similar title. However, in order to make it more eye-catching, it would be best if an exclamation mark was added to the end of the title to make it, 'This House Is Chaos!'. This would add a comedic effect.

Although this seems like a great title, it can be a little predictable.

Both the description and foreword was clean and neat. The length of the description is just right as well. You author's note is also fine. The description and foreword can be easily read by mobile users. The poster is also eye-catching.
Of course, the description at first seems to be depressing, dark and dismal. However, the 'Help! This house is chaos.' line at the end of the description sets the mood and reveals to the reader that it is a comedy genre.

However, your description could do with some touch-ups to make it flow easier.

For example:

Original: I have once heard that humans can never be under complete control. It explains why I was thrown into the toilet bowl when I was two, trapped under the blankets at the age of four, blamed guilty for something I never did, and by seven I had already had a taste of hell.
Now that I remember, there was also an incident I nearly got hit by the school bus when I was nine!

Fixed: They say humans could never be under complete control. That explains why I was thrown into the toilet bowl when I was two, trapped under the blanket at age four, blamed guilty for an act I hadn't done, and by seven I had already gotten a glimpse of hell.
Now that I remember, there was an incident where I almost died from a school bus when I was nine!

    • Appearance: 003 / 005

    • Plot: 017 / 020

Honestly, I think Taehyung is the funniest character. His relationship with his younger sister is gold. I love how he mucks around and is pretty much the definition of an older brother. Out of all your characters, he seems to be one of the most developed.

Taehyung, Jin, Namjoon and Heein seem to be consistent throughout the story. Taehyung and Seokjin seem to have distinct personalities while Namjoon so far seems like a cool older brother who just goes with the flow. Although these characters have great traits, I believe Jin and Namjoon especially need more attention. Jungkook had recently been introduced. So far he seems caring and loyal, but that's all that's been shown about him. We need to know more about him since so far his personality seems like a blur.

I'm not an ARMY, and I only like reading BTS fiction for some odd reason, so I don't know them too well. However, I know that the group is portrayed in a dorky way according to the fans. Seokjin in real life seems like a nice guy. That's also what he seems like in the story. Also, Taehyung seems like a guy who messes with his friends. That's what he does in the story as well.

I love the way you reveal the characters' personalities to the readers. Instead of directly stating that Jin is the eldest brother who is overprotective of his little sister, you reveal it through his actions. Another example would be that instead of saying that Taehyung likes to watch music shows and likes girl groups such as gfriend and twice, you show that by making him fight over the remote.

For someone whose native language is one other than English, you have done very well. There were only a few flaws to pick on. In the beginning of chapter one, it says '20 minutes'. However, according to my sources, it is correct to spell out the numbers within one to one hundred instead of using the numerals. Of course, there are exceptions. The speech should instead look like, 'Get out now! You've been sitting there for the past twenty minutes!'. Again, the same thing happens in chapter five where is says '40 minutes' but should be 'forty minutes'.

Also in chapter five, Seokjin says, 'Excuse me, Mr.' However, Mr. Should be used only when put in front of a person's name such as 'Mr. Kim.' However, as Seokjin is using it as a replacement for a name, it should be, 'Excuse me, mister.'

Whoops! There are a few other small mistakes.

Original:
'He worker sighed.'

Fixed:
'The worker sighed.'

Original:
'I stopped, causing the boy behind to jump into my back.'

Fixed:
'I stopped, causing the boy behind me to jump onto my back.'

Original:
'"Planning on joining the club?" He asked, as if he already knew the reason as to why I had come.'

Fixed:
'"Planning on joining the club?" he asked as if he already knew the reason as to why I had come.'

I reckon this is the type of story that depends on dialogue and actions rather than the main character's thoughts. I believe the length of the paragraphs in each story were appropriate.

The readers are able to visualize and hear. The characters didn't really eat anything or smell much, so I can't criticise that. However, in the first chapter, Heein's hair is still wet. So wouldn't it feel cold? There should be a description or even just an adjective to address how damp her hair is or how cold it is that it forced Heein to shiver.

The story is written in first point of view. There are a few do's and dont's of writing in this perspective. In the beginning of chapter one, the main character narrates, 'Namjoon kicked the door and I thought it would break open any minute.' However, it is meant to be 'Namjoon kicked the door that could break open any minute.' If you have not yet noticed, the phrase I mainly wanted to remove was 'I thought.' This is because words such as I thought, I feel, I hear, and it seems are all examples of filter words. Now I won't get too deep into that since this is a review, not a guide. However, please care to search 'filter words' up as it is very important in the first point of view story.

'Our class was sent into the gymnasium where the boys were playing the first game of basketball.' Hooray! You said 'gymnasium' instead of 'gym'. Nice word choice.

I love how in the middle of chapter one, you indicate that Heein has changed the channel to Descendants of the Sun by narrating 'Put down the gun' in italics instead of directly stating that she changed the channel.

Personally, I'm not a fan of dialogue filled with capital letters like this, 'HEY I HEARD THAT KIM TAEHYUNG!' But then again, this is a family comedy so it's actually quite suitable for the story.

Again, I'm not a fan of switching from one character's point of view to another. However, it's quite suitable for a comedic fanfic like this.

I think you could fix up some of the longer sentences such as:

Original:
Luckily the cafe was outvoted by the haunted house by 3 votes and our class finalized on following along with the preparations for the scare.

Fixed:
Luckily the cafe was outvoted. The haunted house won by three votes, so our class finalized on following along with the preparations for the scare.

'Seems like he lost his girl phobia. My boy's all grown up now. I thought.' Since this is already written in the first point of view, you don't need an 'I thought' tag, and you must get rid of the italics. It's already from Heein's perspective, and the reader can already see all her thoughts.

    • Personal Satisfaction: 004 / 005