☎Oyechi : Dearly Beloved
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Title [7/10]
I can't see the title matches the story well. I know the meaning is the one you love but it doesn't seems to fit well in the story. I don't have any idea what it's supposed to be but there's something wrong though. XD Good try anyway!
Description [10/10]
Honestly, I would say your description is perfect! I love how you combine the colour orange and pink, it's so cute! Your layout is nice and neat, which is good. Good job!
Story Plot & Developement [27/30]
The plot is too cliche, in my opinion tho, but I never see anyone making it as , maybe there is, I didn't realize it (?). I love how you describe that Mark woke up with the smell of coffee and eggs, along with the soft jazzy song, you brought me back to the 80s - 90s. Should I say thank you for that? XD
Grammar [27/30]
There's a few that is quite annoys me. :)
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