Meeting Gone Wrong

The Moon Spirit's Wolf

The whole house was quiet.

 

I couldn't sense anyone, which meant everyone had to be asleep. I'll take this chance to familiarize myself with the mansion.

 

I tiptoed out of my shared room with Taehyung and started toward the stairs. I passed my pack's rooms without much trouble but when I got to Mark's room I heard a noise, I froze hoping he was just getting comfortable.

 

I waited two more minutes and when I deemed it safe continued on my journey. Once I was safely passed all the rooms I ran down the stairs and kept running only stopping when I realized I’ve seen the same painting three times already.

 

Well , I’m lost.

 

Okay Jungkook where were you last. Left, right, straight... oh .

 

Well this happened a lot faster than I thought it would. What the hell Jungkook you're a wolf, use your senses.

 

I stopped, breathing in deeply, taking my time to register every smell. After a few minutes I finally make it to the front entrance.

 

Yay!

 

It was about five in the morning so I should have a few hours to roam around and explore before they all wake up. I walk around the garden admiring the large assortment of flowers and enjoying the cool breeze of the morning.

 

I was in my own world when I spotted something at the corner of my eye; it was a wolf. This wolf felt different though, I couldn’t really get a clear view to make out any distinct features, but I could see the outline of the wolf and it's glowing silver eyes. It didn’t feel like all the other wolves, it's presence was way stronger, overwhelming almost.

 

I don’t even know how much time passed while I was staring at the mysterious wolf but I could tell the sun had risen pretty far in the sky.

 

While I was having my stare off I could feel my feet moving on their own, carrying me to the wolf. My head screamed at me to stop and run in the other direction but something else in me told me that I could trust this wolf.

 

“JUNGKOOK!”

 

I whipped around at the sound of my name and saw a big brown and black wolf running straight toward me. Before I could react I was on the ground, the black and brown fur ball my face.

 

“ha ha o-okay Jimin hyung s-stop.. that.. tickles!” I gasped in between giggles.

 

The rest of the guys came into view soon after.

 

“Where the hell were you?!” Yoongi yelled he was breathing hard and his face was all red. Taking a good look at them all, all of them were breathing hard and had red faces. I suddenly felt bad, were they all looking for me?

 

“I was here walking around in the garden, I wasn't even that far” I said trying not to sound guilty.

 

“Jungkook we've been looking for you for more than two hours!” Jaebum yelled flailing his arms around.

 

“And what do you mean in the garden, we looked there and you were no where to be found! How did you even end up here?!” Hoseok added.

 

Wait. What.

 

I looked around and sure enough I was no longer in the garden like I had last remembered, I don’t even know where I am actually. “Where are we?”

 

“You're kidding right? You're the one who came here and you don't even know where you are?!” Again with the yelling, why is everyone so mad I couldn’t have gone that far.

 

“You're an hour away from the house Jungkook!” Jinyoung hyung informed me.

 

“...Huh? T-that's impossible, what time is it?”

 

“It's seven” Namjoon spoke up.

 

“I was only walking around for like.. thirty minutes, and I don’t even remember coming here” I rubbed my chin in thought.

 

“What do you mean you don't remember, what were you doing sleepwalking?” Jackson asked with a sarcastic tone. I rolled my eyes, he always seems to make serious situation into something dumb.

 

“Yes hyung I woke up, walked around a little bit, fell asleep while I was walking and then a unicorn took me on a ride down a rainbow into the sunset and now I’m here.” I replied just as sarcastically, entering into a staring contest with Jackson.

 

“Okay enough with the sarcasm, we need to know how you got here” Jin hyung walked in front of me completely blocking my view of Jackson.

 

“Like I said hyung I don’t know, one minute I was walking and the next thing I know Jimin hyung is running after me” I can see the wary look he had.

 

I sighed walking past them giving up on trying to explain what I cant even explain to myself. Suddenly I remember the wolf but when I look back it is no longer there, confused I continue to walking back.

 

“Where do you think you're going” Mark is in front of me within seconds. He some how manages to pick me up and put me on his back while shifting into his reddish-brown wolf. I squeak at the sudden move and before I know it I'm being carried by Mark while he is running at top speed through the forest. Behind me I can hear the shouts from the other guys, I chuckle not really caring because this feels so damn nice, even if I’m not the one running.

 

The others are finally catching up especially Hoseok who is flying past everyone, I look forward and see Mark running straight toward a cliff.

 

My eyes widen “Mark the cliff!” I scream clutching on tighter, I can faintly hear the howls and barks from the other wolves over my erratic heartbeat. Mark jumps right off the cliff.

 

Time freezes

 

I can see the whole forest and even the mansion, everything is so beautiful from up here. I feel like I’m flying, everything around me is gone and it's just me, souring through the sky. Then I'm on the ground again and the world goes back to normal.

 

I jumped off Mark's back while he shifts. “Amazing wasn't it” It was more of a statement than a question and all I could do is nod dumbly still not comprehending what just happened.

 

“ARE YOU CRAZY OR ARE YOU JUST STUPID? HOW COULD YOU JUMP OFF THAT CLIFF WITH KOOKIE ON YOUR BACK?!” Jin looked like he could explode any minute,

 

“Hyung calm down it's not that big of a deal” I tried reasoning with him. “Kookie it's no BIG DEAL!” Okay he's still mad.

 

I was going to try and defend Mark when said person went flying into a tree. Ouch.

 

I knew it was Hoseok hyung before I even looked at him, no one else at that kind of strenght. “How ing dare you put my Kookie in danger like that, who the do you think you are?” Hoseok gritted through clench teeth. I've never seen the normally smiley walking ball of sunshine this angry.

 

He threw a punch at Mark, luckily Mark dodged it but the poor tree took the blow instead sending it crashing down.

 

“What the Hoseok!” Mark shouted not understanding why he was being attacked.

 

, this wasn't good.

 

Wolves were normally very strong but not this strong, if I don't stop him things are going to get out of hand. Their powers are suppose to be a secret but Hoseok hyung is making it very obvious. With his abilities he could could take down a whole building with one punch, I'd hate to see what he could do to Mark Beautiful face.

 

The minute I saw Hoseok hyung going in for another shot my instinct kicked in and I ran straight for him ignoring the protest. Once I was close enough I sprung right in front of Mark effectively halting Hoseok's actions.

 

“Move Jungkook” he commanded.

 

“NO!” even I was surprised at how firm my voice was it was like it wasn't my voice at all.

 

His eyes widened taken aback, I felt bad but there was no way I was backing down. “look hyung Mark did nothing wrong!”

 

“But you could have gotten hurt” his features softening already. “but I didn't and I loved it; it was amazing!” I exclaimed.

 

He took a deep breath still trying to calm down. I wasn't expecting the hurt look in his eyes as he looked up at me. “whatever Jungkook” and with that he walked away.

 

I stood there dumbfounded. What did I do?

 

“Go talk to him” Namjoon piped in, as soon as he said it I was running. I didn't realize that maybe he felt betrayed; oh God he was worried about me and I completely disregarded his feelings and yelled at him.

 

, I can be so stupid sometime. Where the heck is he?!

 

“Hoseok!” no response. I ran in the house toward his room, why does he have to be so damn fast.

 

I got to his door after taking a few wrong turns, stupid confusing hallways. “Hyung let me in!” I banged on the door. “Go away Jungkook, I'm fine”

 

“Hyung don't lie”

 

“…”

 

“Hyung... please” I whispered, I felt the tears welling up in my eyes. That's when the door opened and I was pulled into a pair of strong arms. “I'm so sorry hyung, I yelled at you without even thinking about your feelings, I’m so stupid” I sniveled, trying hard to keep myself from crying. I felt so bad that I hurt my precious hyung.

 

“Shh Kookie I'm not mad at you”

 

“...Huh” I said incredulously “than why did you look at me like that and walk away?”
 

“Okay I was a little mad at you but I was mostly mad at myself”

 

I stared at him in confusion.

 

Picking up on my confusion, he quickly answered, “Kookie do you realize how dangerous you are?”

 

“ME?” I pointed to myself dumbly.

 

“Yes you Kookie” he chuckled “When ever you are involved it's like everything flies out the window and I’m no longer worried about consequences, I no longer think about what's wrong or right, I just act on instinct, and it's the same for everyone else. You are our weakness Jungkook”

 

I stay silent not really knowing what to say.

 

“umm... I’m sorry?” I finally say. Hoseok laughs, his normal loud obnoxious laugh. I smile at the familiar sound.

 

“Don't be sorry it's a wonderful thing”

 

“Hyung did you hit your head, how is that a wonderful thing?”

 

“Because Kookie it shows how much we love and care for you. Right?”

 

I nod feeling yet another blush coming on. “Ah Kookie~ you are so cute!” he says pinching my cheeks.

 

“Ugh hyung~ stop” I whine, swatting his hands away. “come on lets go down stairs” I follow him out, the smell of food hitting my nose the minute I step out of the room, and I realize how hungry I actually am.

 

We make our way to the dining table, everyone is already stuffing their faces with food. I take my place in between Namjoon hyung and Jin hyung.

 

“You guys okay?” Jin asks. “Yea we're fine” Hoseok answers first winking at me, I put my head down trying to ignore the questioning glances.

 

“Well after this we were thinking about going to lake nearby, it'll be fun I think, and it seems we all need a bit of fun. How does that sound?” Jaebum hyung speaks up from the end of the table.

 

“I think that's a great idea don't you think so Namjoon?” Jin gives Namjoon one of his you better agree with me smiles.

 

“Uhh... yea sure” Namjoon hyung really has no choice but to accept.

 

“Well than it's settled we'll get ready now seeing as everyone is basically done eating, be ready in fifteen”

 

Everyone is scrambling to get to their rooms to get ready.

 

I get up to walk to my room when the whole world shifts and I'm suddenly staring at the ground. It takes me a minute to realize that I'm taking a ride over someone shoulder, and the mop of orange hair tells me it's Taehyung.

 

“You know hyung I could walk there by myself”

 

“But you were taking so long and I figured I would help you out, and I didn’t wanna have to wait for you in the shower.”

 

“Oh okay... wait shower! No no no, I am not taking a shower with you!” I cried.

 

“Why~” is he using his aegyo? He knows I cant resist his aegyo. “You shower with Jimin but you can't shower with me?!” and now I feel bad, how does this dumb alien do this.

 

“Okay okay let's just hurry”

 

The shower went by fairly quickly and painlessly, except Taehyung kept trying to wash me when I could clearly do it myself. We got ready and headed outside but thanks to Taehyung we were the last ones.

 

“What took you so long?” Jimin complained. “I was trying to wash Kookie but he wouldn’t let me so that set us back a little” he has the nerve to glare at me like it was my fault!

 

“Taehyung he can wash himself though” Youngjae countered. “Yea but his skin is soft”

 

Everyone stayed silent, and just ignored him knowing we will never understand his brain.

 

“Okay whose back are you riding on?” Jin asked, silently telling me to pick him. At first I was going to but then I caught sight of Namjoon who was staring at me, I remembered our fight and figured it was now or never.

 

“I'll ride with Namjoon hyung” I tried to sound confident but my voice betrayed me and it wavered, sounding more unsure than anything. Both Jin's and Namjoon's eyes widened at my answer.

 

“Um Kookie are you sure?” Jin must have known about the argument.

 

“Is that okay with you Namjoon hyung?” I asked with fake innocence, knowing he wouldn’t make a scene in front of the others.

 

“Yea sure why not” he glared at me, I couldn't help but feel proud.

 

 

 

 

 

 

The little dip knows me, he knows I hate involving other people in my business, so there is no way I could say no or it would make the others suspicious.

 

Now I'm stuck with carrying him. Ugh I mean I want to make up with him but I don’t think I'm ready. Just as I was starting to get trapped in my thoughts Jungkook started to speak.

 

“Listen Namjoon hyung I know you're probably mad at me but I just really wanted to talk to you and this was the only way I knew I could without you blowing me off” Great now I feel bad.

 

I hummed in response.

 

“W-well you know the fight we had I'm... sorry I didn't mean to be disrespectful but I was just worried that you were blaming yourself for the incident and I couldn’t have you do that” Now I feel even worse, he's not even mad at the fact that I yelled at him but because he thought I was blaming myself. This kid what am I going to do with you?

 

I stopped signaling to the others to go on without us, Jin looked at me warily, I gave him reassuring nod.

 

“Um hyung why did we stop?” Jungkook asked obviously nervous. I shift back before he could say anything else.

 

“Jungkook one day I’m just gonna...” I stop myself from finishing that sentence and just pulled him to me.

 

He squeals at the unexpected move trying to push me away but then he relaxes into my arms. “You're not mad anymore?” his voice is so quiet I’m not even sure if he said it.

 

“No Jungkook I could never be mad at you” we stayed like that until I realized that I’m hugging Jungkook .

 

Oh my ing God!

 

I push Jungkook away and take the backpack he's carrying running behind a tree to put my clothes on. When I come back he's on the floor and his face is buried in his hands. The only thing I could think of is that I hurt him, I run to his side hoping that I didn’t hurt him too bad.

 

Kookie! Did I hurt you?!” I gently pull his hands away from his face only to be met with a very red Jungkook.

 

“Hyung, your so stupid!” he yells jerking away from me.

 

What...

 

Than I realize he is embarrassed, his face is redder than a tomato and when I touched him he was burning, I chuckle at his cuteness, seriously one day I am going to kiss him if he keeps being this cute.

 

“I'm sorry Kookie” I try holding back my laughter. “Don't laugh!” he screams his face getting impossibly redder.

 

“Okay okay I’m sorry let's just go” we walk toward the lake luckily it's close, Jungkook is still red not as much as before but still enough to notice. I decide to mess with him a little just because he is so cute.

 

What's wrong with me. I do not want to kiss Jungkook.

 

I take his hand in mine pulling him toward the lake but right before we get to the others, I give him a little peck on the cheek... and there goes his face turning redder than ever.

 

Okay maybe I do want to kiss him.

 

I run off joining the others before he has enough time to react.

 

AAARRRRRGGGGGGGG

 

I turn around at the noise and Jungkook is running straight for me I was going to move but that wouldn't be any fun, so I let him tackle me, but instead he stops right in front of me.

 

Jungkook's face is so close I think he is going to kiss me but instead I feel his breath hit my ear, “Stop teasing me” and next thing I know he is pushing me off the small cliff into the water.

 

The cold water sends a shock through my body but it's soon replace with a warmth. Jungkook's small hands are wrapping around me and pulling me to the surface.

 

“What was that?!” I gasp still trying to fill my lungs with much needed air. “What was what?” he tilts his head like he normally does when he is trying to play innocent.

 

I was staring at Jungkook with what I believed to be a very dumbfounded look when his head tilted upward, I followed his motion and came in eye contact with twelve very confused faces.

 

“Come in, the water's great!” Jungkook screams right by my ear, splashing everyone in the process.

 

Everyone was in the water within seconds. The rest of the day consisted of playing in the water, eating the food Jin brought, and playing in the water some more.

 

It was about 9 o'clock and we were all lying on the ground looking up at the stars.

 

“Today was fun wasn't it?” Jungkook said breaking the silence. I turned to him to be greeted with the most beautiful smile, he look genuinely happy.

 

“Yea Kook” I answer trying to hide the huge smile on my face. We all stayed like this enjoying the night and drowning in the power the moon gave us.

 

“We should get back soon it's getting really late and there is school tomorrow” Jaebum spoke as he got up dusting off the dirt.

 

We all proceeded to get up except one. “Kookie-ah come get up didn't you hear?” Taehyung said to the boy tucked into himself. “Um he fell asleep”

 

Taehyung moved the raven hair from the boys face and sure enough he was asleep. I couldn't help but stare at the beautiful sleeping boy, it seemed like he was glowing under the moon's light, it was breathtaking.

 

I guess I’m not the only one who thinks so, looking at the others they were all staring at the raven haired boy too. “is it just me or does it look like he's glowing?” of course our alien is the one to voice his thoughts out loud.

 

We all nodded our heads nonetheless, I was about to ask who is going to wake him up when Mark beat me to it “Soooo who's going to wake him up?” We all looked at each other wondering who will be the to disturb such a beautiful scene.

 

Suddenly Bambam stepped forward and crouched down next to the glowing angel -angel? what is wrong with me? What is this boy doing to me?!- gently shaking him “Kookie wake up~”

 

After a few shakes Jungkook grumbled and sat up rubbing his eyes, “huh? What happened?” oh gosh why does he have to be so cute?

 

“Ahh Kookie~ you are so cute” Jimin ran to Jungkook engulfing him in his embrace, and soon everybody -excluding Jaebum, Mark, Jin, Youngjae, and me- started to hug and suffocate the poor boy.

 

“Hyungs get off~” Jungkook whined from somewhere in the pile of bodies, it took Jin, Youngjae, and Mark to get Jungkook out of the pile.

 

“Really hyungs I couldn't breath” Jungkook pouted. “Keep being cute and we might just eat you” Hoseok said winking at him causing Jungkook's already big eyes to double in size. I sent him a glare.

 

Jungkook is a very dangerous individual now that I think about it, to have us all wrapped around his finger, and to make it worse he doesn’t even know it.

 

Jungkook begrudgingly walks over to Jin, taps him on the shoulder and has Jin shifting within seconds willingly giving his back up so Jungkook can sleep.

 

Yep, wrapped around his finger.

 

The run back -well more like a walk considering Jungkook is asleep on Jin's back- was quiet and calm, no one really said anything probably all tired form the days activities. As for me I was more worried than anything, scenarios of how tonight is going to work out flashing in my head.

 

We should confront him tonight when we get back to the pack house” I suggest, noting the flash of fear and uncertainty in Jin's eyes.

 

I don't know he's having such a good time-” he gestures toward a laughing Jungkook on Jackson's shoulders trying to wrestle a giggling Bambam off of Mark's shoulders. “I really don't want to be the cause of that smile disappearing, do you?”

 

Of course not but what if he's hiding something that can cause him harm” I try reasoning; in all honestly I really don't want to do this either, but I’m going to drive myself mad if I don't get answers.

 

Alright but let me do most of the talking please” Jin pleads, “What's that suppose to mean? I can talk to him just fine” I defend myself getting annoyed with the lack of trust “Namjoon you know what I mean, you tend to be blunt and you don't really think before you speak” Jin says in his all knowing tone. “Whatever” I give in knowing there is no use in arguing with Jin.

 

We have to do this right”

 

 

 

 

 

I didn't really think much when all of the BTS members got up and left the table at the same time excluding Jin and me, but when Jin got up to leave and dragged me with him with the excuse of, I need to wash up, I knew something was wrong.

 

I was about to ask what was happening when Jin hyung shoved me into Namjoon hyung's room. “what th-” I stopped when I looked up and noticed everyone sitting there with serious faces. What did I do now?

 

I gulped, was I in trouble? Everyone looked so serious even Taehyung and Jimin. “Umm am I in trouble?” I was starting to get really nervous.

 

“No Jungkook, we just want to... ask you some questions” Jin answered rubbing my back reassuringly.

 

Well, I’m ed.

 

“Go ahead Taehyung” Namjoon nods toward Taehyung. Taehyung takes a deep breath, eyes closing only to snap open a few seconds later glowing a blood red. His eyes always fascinated me, no other wolf has red eyes only Taehyung which makes him special, well I guess all of BTS are special. Back to Taehyung who's starting to look pretty scary, and next thing I know the room is spinning and the world around me is looking all weird and trippy.

 

Then everything is calm again, I open my eyes, -I hadn't realized I closed them till now- everyone looks fine, like if the world wasn't just spinning violently. Then it clicks. Taehyung, red eyes, and a spinning world; Taehyung just used his ability, which means we are probably in one of his black holes.

 

“Why?” I asked, scared of the response. What were they going to ask that they had to ask in a completely different dimension. “Calm down Kookie, we just don't want to risk anyone hearing.” Yoongi said.

 

“Okay whatever it is just ask please, you're making me very nervous”

 

“Okay well to start do you feel... different?” Jin asked cautiously.

 

What

 

“What do you mean different, I don't think I feel different, why am I acting different?” I panic.

 

“No no, well we were just curious because well-” before Jin could finish Taehyung spoke “Look Kookie I’m worried- we're all worried, you said you've been feeling weird and we just want to make sure everything is okay”

 

I feel slightly betrayed because I only told Taehyung about my problems and he just told the rest so easily, I thought I could trust him. I guess he could tell what I was thinking because he quickly defended himself “I didn't tell them anything Jungkook, you can trust me- us, we just want to make sure you aren't hurt or anything”

 

“Wait you two have been hiding things from us?!” Namjoon half yells. “NO! I just, just confided in Taehyung” I put my head down in guilt, I guess I should have told everyone since we're suppose to be family.

 

“Jungkook whatever it is you have to know that you can tell any one of us” Hoseok reasons. “oh please you guys are just jealous that he came to me instead of you” Taehyung smirks, his eyes still glowing the deep red color making him seem evil.

 

“Enough” Jin raises his voice, which is weird for the normally calm hyung. “Jungkook let's start when we got here and you said you felt something strange” he redirects everyone's attention back to me.

 

I sigh at the thought of having to explain all this again, “Well it's like I said before to Taehyung, it felt like something was trying to warn me to stay away form here” I quickly answer hoping this is enough to get me out of this situation. But by the looks on everyone’s faces I could tell they want more. Everyone exchanges glances, I didn't miss Yoongi hyung's nod.

 

“Well what about at the dinner table you felt me trying to read your mind didn't you?” Yoongi hyung questioned with a challenging tone. I was taken aback because he actually admitted to trying to read my mind. “Hyung why would you do that? You should know that the reason why I don't shift is a topic I'm not ready to share.” I say trying to hide the hurt in my voice.

 

“Jungkook that's not the problem here! It's the fact that you blocked me!” I was shocked, never had Yoongi hyung yelled or even gotten mad at me, I tried to will away the tears threatening to fall. I looked around and everyone else seemed just as shocked, it wasn't normal for Yoongi to get mad so easily. I felt so attacked, how could he just ignore the fact that what he tried to do was wrong and it hurt me.

 

“Yes it is a problem! You tried to invade my privacy knowing how much I hate that! Especially on such a sensitive matter!” I yelled back throwing all formalities out the window. “You have no right to snoop through my mind!”

 

“You think I care about that Jungkook! I was trying to help you!” Yoongi stood up, fist clenching in anger.

 

“Help!” I screeched, “Help who?! Yourself. You know I’m not ready to talk about that and you still tried to forcefully get it out of me!”

 

“Oh grow up! It's really not that big of a deal!” I saw Jin get up trying to diffuse the situation but it was already to late.

 

I felt something snap, I closed my eyes trying to keep calm. How could he say that?! This was something that I really cared about, everyone already agreed to wait until I was ready to speak about it, yet he was just going to treat it like if it was some dumb, childish matter?! I felt like I was going to explode.

 

I needed to get out of here now.

 

I needed to be alone.

 

I felt my blood boiling.

 

I needed to leave.

 

“Taehyung bring me back” I gritted out, taking deep breaths. I heard a soft “I can't”

 

“Jungkook look calm down, let's just talk” I faintly hear Namjoon say, everything seems so far away.

 

“Namjoon I think we should stop this, he needs to calm down” Jin intervenes.

 

They all start to talk and it's just too much, I can't take it the voices are too loud and they won't stop, my blood is still boiling and I feel like I’m suffocating.

 

“AHHHHHHHHHHH” it climbs it's way up my throat before I can even stop it.

 

“Taehyung. Take. Me. Back.”

 

The world is spinning and then we're back.

 

The minute my senses come back I start running, I have no clue where but I just keep going. The fresh air bringing oxygen back into my lungs, the ground keeping me from falling into the abyss that is insistently pulling me in, and the moon cooling down my burning veins, coaxing me into it's arms.

 

Then everything went dark.

 

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AN)

HI!!!!!!!!!!

So Jungkook... things are happening to him. 

I added Kookiemonster and a little Kookhope ????(what is there ship name?)

I kinda made Suga a little bit of an , it just happened that way.

but next chapter we are going to see it from Suga's point of view.

Okay bye!!! Enjoy.

 

 

 

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babygreenlizard
#1
I love how you give ADHD Tae, the most dangerous powers... lol XD
Titanik #2
I bet Jungkook's blessed by the Moon Goddess.
sujudbsk #3
Chapter 20: Please update part 2.
asyalukie_ #4
Chapter 20: This is sooooo good! please continue with part two... I really really want to know what happen after that..
sujudbsk #5
Chapter 20: Please update part two of this story. I really really want to read it. Hwaighting Author-nim!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Exo_Kai_Sehun
#6
Chapter 20: update please ! :) X
lia2001 #7
Chapter 20: next next
AjSummer #8
Chapter 20: I wasn't expecting a story like this... but I'm not disappointed at all!! This is so interesting and I can really feel for the characters. However to me it seemed like you strayed from your initial purpose of the story, like the story line itself changed but maybe it's just the way you wrote it. Moreover, I don't know if you've ever reread your story, but if you do you will see how much your writing has improved
dddddd123 #9
Chapter 20: seriously your story is so amazing...already finish this story and gonna wait for next part...i'll wait for you...
chelsead #10
just amazing ... *O*