Stole Your Heart [Click for the link]

by naikee14

Title :  9 /10

The title isn't very eye catching but it's still fine.

Foreword / Description :  17 /20

You describe Suzy's background nicely.

Grammar/Spelling:   23/30

You made quite a few grammars mistake..

1) Suzy smiled and enter her mother's room.

2) Suzy patted her mother's arm.

3) Suzy went out of her mother's room.

4) She knocked harder and heard a girly voices groaning mean(s)ing her sister were awake.

5) "Why are you keep following me?"

and others. Try not to repeat the same mistakes again. (Don't want to sound harsh.)

Plot :  10/10

The story plot looks original. It's quite interesting to know that Kai is a writer while Suzy's a thief.

Story flow :   9/10

It would be better if you write it in a story form instead of one shot. It got my attention tbh. (my opinion)

Characters combination :   20/20

I'll give you credit for putting Kai and Suzy together. Seldom see this couple.

Bonus :  9 /10

I liked your story overall. -nods nods-

Total :   97/110

Sorry if you think your marks is low. It's just based on my opinion.

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