Review done on October 6, 2016 for Roses' Shop

User: Dark-Dragon243

Story + Story Link: Beauty In The Shadows + http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/1112016 

Story Description: Tao is just your average klutz, who is thought of as a little crazy because of his accusations that someone is watching him. A lot of people, even his own roommate, don't believe him and usually stick to avoiding him, and he's okay with that, though he doesn't like to admit that it hurts. When he does eventually meet his "stalker", Kris, a vampire he happens to be the mate of, his life is shaken, and he's thrown into the world of mystical creatures that he was always told never existed. 

Genres: supernatural, fantasy, vampireau 

Main Character(s) + Supporting Character(s): Wu Yifan, Huang Zitao + Exo members, Various Idols

Title (005/005): It matches well.

Description/Forward (010/010): You did very well the description and forward.

Characterization (005/020): I think you’re too focused on little details that you lose your characterizing as you go. Be extra careful of that. One example would be Kyungsoo. You don’t give him too much of a characterization but then you practically throw a full blown mental examination like 4 chapters later. This is a lot for readers to take in and can also be consider as a writer’s way to tak