Review done on September 30, 2016 for Roses Shop

User: AlexsesKim

Story + Link: Once In Your Life + (https://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/692823/once-in-your-life-angst-exo-baekhyun-ocfic)

Story Description: Baekhyun lost something very important to him. He finds a miracle and the most ironic twist of Fate.

Genres: Angst, Slice of Life

Main Characters + Supporting Characters: Baekhyun, Wren (OC) + Chanyeol, rest of Exo (?)

Title (000/005): I feel like your title really is an off title to use for this kind of story. First “Once in Your Life” is a bit cliché. For me, I honestly always think this is like the beginning of a sentence. I’ve seen this kind of format used so many times before that it really bores me. I will say this though it’s interesting but just not enough to attract the readers’ eyes. Try something unique like using an old fashion word or something that gives the “Come and read me now!” feel.

Description/Forward (005/010): Your description is okay but I wouldn’t put so much spaces. If you notice when you look up your story, all readers see are “He has always believed. Fairytales, legends, spells- WISHES” AFF only allows about 62-63 characters for first glance description so use this as an advantage. Think of it as an advertisement to your story. What do you want to say about your story that gives the readers a reason