Review done on October 6, 2016 for Rose's Shop

User: Moelolz 

Story + Story Link: Turquoise Eyes +  https://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/1157581/turquoise-eyes-fantasy-romance-supernatural-vampires-originalcharacter-exo-forestsmoke 

Genres: fantasy, romance, angst 

Description: "Princess Miko was the perfect princess.  With velvety raven strands that cascade down her back like a fluttering waterfall and skin so pure and white that snow would seem dirty next to it, she was the pride of her country. Or, to be more precise, she was raised to be the pride of the country. Whilst the humans battled the Vampires, Princess Miko remained locked up in the castle – safe and sound away from the sun and sweat and blood. Her tender skin never known to hard work and her blood never known to boil under the scorching sun. Princess Miko was the perfect princess. She was the perfect princess to offer as sacrifice to the Vampire kingdom."

Main Character(s)+ Supporting Character(s): Miko (OC), Sehun + Lay, Kai

Title (004/005): Although the title does match the whole theme of the story, it’s not eye catching. It doesn’t scream to the passing by readers, “Read me!”

Description/Forward (009/010): Your description is an opportunity to attract readers so use it. On AFF you have an average of 62-63 characters allowed for a description at first look. When you look at your story (like when you go to your stories), this is what the description comes up as “He had fair skin and wavy, light-colored hair. But what struck her the most, was his