Review done on September 24, 2016 for Roses' Shop

Username: Silver_Light

Story Title + Link: Seeking You + http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/1145288/seeking-you-gangs-romance-exok-exom-luhan-sehun-highschoolau

Story Description: The popular girl in high school is secretly crushing on the nerd, Luhan. She helps him when he's being bullied. So when her younger brother, Sehun gets caught up in a gang war; she finds herself desperately trying to help Sehun. Accidentally she finds out that the gang for which her brother is now working with, exo-- The second-in-command is in fact Luhan.

Story Genre(s): romance, slightangst, gangsandmafia

Main Characters + Supporting Characters: Sena (OC), Luhan, Sehun

Title (000/005): Honestly, the title has nothing to do with the story. Also is there a point to naming the chapters after flowers? If not, I suggest you should probably change them.

Description/Forward (008/010): Your description is okay. However I wouldn’t practically sum up the whole story in the Description. Instead try something like “After losing both her parents…”  Your Forward is also okay.

Characterization (010/020): You seem to be struggling a bit with Sena’s character. One minute she is the weak character who is afraid of her own shadow and then she’s a tiger lady, who is too stubborn to do what she’s told. Which is she? What do you intend for her to become? When you write, think about who she is a