Review done on September 23, 2016 for Roses' Shop

Username: c0smic

Story Title + Link: Youth + http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/1169695/youth-angst-yoongi-bts-jungkook-namjoon-hoseok-seokjin

Story Description: Seokjin is your estranged husband who lost his love and passion for you years ago, and Min Yoongi is your 24-year-old dirty little secret that only your bedroom walls know about.

Story Genre(s): angst yoongi bts jungkook namjoon hoseok seokjin

Characters + Supporting Characters Main : Yoongi, Jisoo (you), Seokjin

Title (004/005): I get your title but I would have chosen a more eye catching title. Remember this is the first thing that the readers when they’re doing whatever they’re doing. I would try something like “Fleeting Youth” or “Dangerous Youth.”

Description/Forward (002/010): Your description is extremely misleading and boring. There’s nothing that pops out and gives a “read me now” feel. I would suggest revising it. Forward is okay.

Characterization (010/020): I wish you had developed Seokjin’s character more.  From an objective view since readers don’t know what he is thinking, you make him sound like a bit of a victim/antagonist. This can be confusing for readers because they don’t really know who’s the hero or protagonist of the story and who is the antagonist. As for Namjoon, although the character is good, I believe you should make Namjoon more loyal to the main character. The two of them are friends since like high school so Jisoo should be able to tell Namjo