Reviewer; Joolay

Now playing; Michael Buble - Christmas / Baby please come home

Title: 5/5

Short and sweet. I like it! ;-p

Poster: -/10

there wasn't a poster so I'll follow the normal procedures by grading it over 90, converting it to a 100, then deducting a mark.

Description and Foreword: 7/10

Your description was actually a foreword, snippets of lines. You should move these lines to the foreword section, and write a short summary about what your story is. Not too much though, don't spoil the story for the readers! ;-p

Your foreword was a note to your readers, so I like said, move down the lines to your foreword, then at the end of your foreword, you could leave your note there. 

Plot: 8/10

I don't see how I could dock many points from your plot. It was feelings about someone. It was really nice though. 

Originality: 9/15

It's a little common for one-sided love plots so but I don't see how these feelings aren't original so you gained back a mark more ;-p

Flow: 8/10

It was really nice. There wasn't some sudden action of events and I wasn't bored by the story. Nice job! ;-p

Grammar/ vocabulary/punctuation/spelling: 16/20

I loved your vocabulary. The fine details of the character's feelings. There were quite a number rhetorical questions in your story, but refrain from using too many of them as it might make it a little frustrating for the readers, because it's like reading the same thing over and over again. I didn't spot any spelling and punctuation mistake. awesome. ;-p

writing style: 8/10

Like I mentioned before, this is the type of writing style I love the most. Everything is so detailed, the feelings especially, it makes me attached to the story even more.

Overall enjoyment: 8/10

I enjoyed reading your story, I felt pity for the character, or in this case, 'me.' I'm quite anticipating your future works. With these writing skills, I believe you can write a very nice story! 

In all, 69/90 - 76/100.

Good luck for for further writings, and I do hope more readers would be exposed to your works! Merry holidays! ;-p

Hugs and kisses,

Joolay♡