Reviewer; Joolay

Now playing; Ukiss- Tick Tack

Title: 3/5

It's pretty interesting but It would be better if it was shorter. Maybe 'Drunkard Hyunseung'? 

Poster: -/10

There wasn't a poster for this one shot so I'll just have this over 90 and deduct a mark later.

Description and Foreword: 5/10

I liked your description. It was nice and short, and it made me want to know what you think would happened if Junhyung's coke is missing and a drunkhyunseung.

However, your foreword was a personal message to the readers so there wasn't anything I couldn't grade on.

Plot: 8/10

It was really funny. The part where Hyunseung kept apologising to Junhyung. It was really nice to read. It's totally easy to imagine in the head sinceHyunseung's such a 4D character.

But the beginning bored me a little. I'm not sure why, maybe it's the joke about Dongwoon looking like a spider. Maybe you could add in more jokes?

Originality: 13/15

Well, it's your own perception and opinions about what happens during these situations so I don't see how unoriginal you would be.

Flow: 7/10

The flow was pretty nice. I didn't feel rushed, I didn't feel like things were being dragged on and Hyunseung didn't take a million years just to get drunk so the flow was pretty good.

Grammar/ vocabulary/punctuation/spelling: 14/20

There were some errors, but they were mostly typo errors so I guess it's fine. I guessed a word or two and it fitted into the sentences. You can proof read to check out the mistakes. 

writing style: 7/10

I liked that you described some of the stuff but for some of the conversation, you didn't state who was talking and sometimes, it confused me a little. I'm not saying you should say, 'Kikwang said,' 'Doojoon exclaimed' stuff like that all the time, but maybe after a few lines, you should add it in, just to make it clear.

Overall enjoyment: 7/10

The jokes were nice and it feels like I'm watching some variety show or a comedy show so, nice job on this! ;-)

In all, 64/90 - 71/100

Good luck on your further works! I've been reading your story about Sungyeol's coffee addiction. Really funny ;-p Heh. I hoped this helped you! ;-)

Hugs and kisses,

Joolay♡