SAID THE LOVE LETTER

AUTHOR: caching12

REVIEWED BY: AmeYuki

TITLE: (4/5)

I could see how your title relates to your story since it’s about Hanol’s love letter to Seungkwan, but it’s not very original, or eye-catching. Also, articles (the, a, an) and short, unimportant words (less than 5 letters) shouldn’t be capitalized unless it’s at the start of the title. Ex: Said the Love Letter (the shouldn’t be capitalized) You can check out this website for more information about how titles are written here.

FOREWORD/DESCRIPTION: (8.5/10)

Your description sums up what your story is going to be about pretty well. One small change I would suggest is separating it into more than one sentence since in my eyes, your description looks a bit run-on, making it harder to read.

Ex: “Unlike his good looks, Hansol has awful handwriting. As a result, Seungkwan is completely baffled when he receives Hansol’s love letter, unable to read a thing due to the poor penmanship. And surprisingly, Hansol finds himself reading his own love letter to the latter himself.”

It makes it easier to read and sounds better in general.

PLOT: (20.5/25)

Your plot is not very original and pretty cliche, since there are a lot of stories about characters receiving love letters. There were some questions I had while reading story as well like how did Minhyun even find out that Hansol was the one that wrote it? Did he go around asking everyone if they were the person? Also, when Minhyun suggests getting the person who wrote it to read it for Seungkwan. Seungkwan say it would be embarrassing for “both me and him.” How did Seungkwan know it was a guy and not a girl? Does he go to an all-boys school or something? And when you wrote, “Hansol waits patiently. He expects rejection and a hard slap on his face as he watches Seungkwan’s serious face,” why would Hansol think Seungkwan would slap him in the face? That’s just unreasonable for Seungkwan to physically hurt Hansol just because Hansol liked him. Plus, if you were rejecting someone, you already hurt their feelings so why would you want to slap them for it and embarrass and hurt them even more?   

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