∗Review: Only For You∗

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ONLY FOR YOU

AUTHOR: KwonMirae

REVIEWED BY: EXOcrux

 

TITLE: (3/5)

To be honest, I did not feel an instant connection with the title. It felt bland and did not stand out from the hundreds of titles that I see in this site. It was also, to a point, cheesy. Although I understand that the title connected well with the story and it had been the recurring statement Soojung used throughout the fic, it was not something I would find myself clicking if there could be other options to try.

 

FOREWORD/DESCRIPTION: (8/10)

The foreword was short but it gave a good feeling of anticipation. I found myself interested in knowing why Soojung never believed in fairytales, and how Jongin made her believe in them eventually. There were some grammatical errors that I spotted which lessened the impact of the message for me. This kind of presentation was also a little on the overuse side, but nonetheless I still get hooked by them every time.

 

PLOT: (15/25)

I cannot really give you full points on the plot because it was simple; too simple in fact. The narration had been about Soojung supporting Jongin during the limited time that they had. That's all there was to it. It was a good thing for me; I liked how you rarely touched other things that weren't related to their moments and even tried to give us some glimpse of Soojung's life outside Jongin. The lack of descriptions and focusing primarily on their conversation also helped in makin

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StoicBread #1
Hi ^.^! Do you accept affiliations request? If so,
http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/1123113
caching12
#2
Chapter 26: I didn't expect such a high score tho lol. Thanks for the review! Will credit later when I'm on PC.
sunflowerpots
#3
Chapter 25: thank you for the review!!^^
kjdzyx
#4
Chapter 23: thank you so much for the review!!! :D :D I was trying out new writing style with this fic so these feedbacks are really important to me! and thank you for spotting those grammatical mistakes >.< I tend to mess up grammar often...
but may I ask that you mentioned "lack of necessary articles like 'the'", but I couldn't find where I need to put 'the' in the fic. Yes Ii have re-read it but I guess I still don't know where I've missed out the word?
anyways I really appreciate the review! It's very helpful and I am glad I request from you :) have a nice day~~
JaeKnight
#5
requested for a review! Merry Christmas! <3
Manlyluhaniie #6
Requested for a review ^^
sunflowerpots
#7
I've requested for a review!!^^
mistressdean
#8
Chapter 22: Because it is crucially important to me, THANK YOU SO MUCH for the grammar section. I didn't get a beta-reader because I'm doing the editing myself over winter break and didn't want to waste anyone's time to comb through my story, so thank you for this.

LOL. No, in Chapter 000, this was only an exaggeration about Jungkook, but I can't blame you for taking it seriously though. The sarcasm was subtle. Anyways, for that reason, Jungkook hasn't moved up in school (like Sheldon from Big Bang Theory, that lil smart haha). Yes, Jungkook is smarter than most, but he's not a certified genius and it's why he treats his position in school with contempt.
I'm sorry. I don't explain my characters to reviewers like this because it sounds like I'm "defending" myself, but I wanted to point out that TDoJ is strong in its exaggeration. Haha.

No, I'm not offended at all! Not about the cliché-ness, not about the long chapters, none of that. I embrace the cliché-ness, tbh. Plus, I know there are chunks I could cut out of the story (which is what I'm doing right now. Lord help me.), but other than that, I'm used to this reaction and I like the different perspectives. Honestly, it flatters me that despite everything said in your review, you found great enjoyment in my story while remaining a critical reviewer throughout it. (Okay, I'm sorry for this feedback that isn't really feedback.)

At last, thank you for your corrections, advice, and time! I will have a second pair of eyes to help me after I do the first round of editing. Thank you for the honest and critical review and I'll credit right away! If any troubles or questions arise, I shall PM you if Google can't help me, but I won't bother you over winter break because of the holidays and school :)
caching12
#9
Hello there, I've requested for a review. Thank you.