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HOW DID WE GET MARRIED?

AUTHOR: mirrue

REVIEWED BY: Meleodiseu

 

TITLE: (4.5/5)

I love the title. It's not too much different from the 'We Got Married?' titles, but the change just enough for me. The tone of the title is different and I don't know how to explain it, but it made me want to read more.

 

FOREWORD/DESCRIPTION: (8.5/10)

The description definitely caught my eye. Yes, it did seem a bit too cliché, especially with the last sentence. However, there aren't that many plots that are similar to yours and leaving the little hook on the end will attract potential readers.

 

PLOT: (22.5/25)

It definitely follows the arranged marriage cliché of “I don't want to get married to someone I don't know but my father is ordering it.” but you added your own twist to it, such as the reason for the marriage. The plot is definitely linear and doesn't hop all over the place, something that is quite refreshing to read. The actions of the characters are quite natural, like Jessica getting flustered and embarrassed when her father brought up her past pregnancy. The only thing that made me question some of it is why Jessica and Krystal weren't outwardly embarrassed by their father's childlike nature (perhaps they were used to it by now?)

 

FLOW: (5/5)

The flow of the story is natural, nothing moves too fast or too slow. You've found a good pace and stuck to it and it makes the story easy to read. I'v

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StoicBread #1
Hi ^.^! Do you accept affiliations request? If so,
http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/1123113
caching12
#2
Chapter 26: I didn't expect such a high score tho lol. Thanks for the review! Will credit later when I'm on PC.
sunflowerpots
#3
Chapter 25: thank you for the review!!^^
kjdzyx
#4
Chapter 23: thank you so much for the review!!! :D :D I was trying out new writing style with this fic so these feedbacks are really important to me! and thank you for spotting those grammatical mistakes >.< I tend to mess up grammar often...
but may I ask that you mentioned "lack of necessary articles like 'the'", but I couldn't find where I need to put 'the' in the fic. Yes Ii have re-read it but I guess I still don't know where I've missed out the word?
anyways I really appreciate the review! It's very helpful and I am glad I request from you :) have a nice day~~
JaeKnight
#5
requested for a review! Merry Christmas! <3
Manlyluhaniie #6
Requested for a review ^^
sunflowerpots
#7
I've requested for a review!!^^
mistressdean
#8
Chapter 22: Because it is crucially important to me, THANK YOU SO MUCH for the grammar section. I didn't get a beta-reader because I'm doing the editing myself over winter break and didn't want to waste anyone's time to comb through my story, so thank you for this.

LOL. No, in Chapter 000, this was only an exaggeration about Jungkook, but I can't blame you for taking it seriously though. The sarcasm was subtle. Anyways, for that reason, Jungkook hasn't moved up in school (like Sheldon from Big Bang Theory, that lil smart haha). Yes, Jungkook is smarter than most, but he's not a certified genius and it's why he treats his position in school with contempt.
I'm sorry. I don't explain my characters to reviewers like this because it sounds like I'm "defending" myself, but I wanted to point out that TDoJ is strong in its exaggeration. Haha.

No, I'm not offended at all! Not about the cliché-ness, not about the long chapters, none of that. I embrace the cliché-ness, tbh. Plus, I know there are chunks I could cut out of the story (which is what I'm doing right now. Lord help me.), but other than that, I'm used to this reaction and I like the different perspectives. Honestly, it flatters me that despite everything said in your review, you found great enjoyment in my story while remaining a critical reviewer throughout it. (Okay, I'm sorry for this feedback that isn't really feedback.)

At last, thank you for your corrections, advice, and time! I will have a second pair of eyes to help me after I do the first round of editing. Thank you for the honest and critical review and I'll credit right away! If any troubles or questions arise, I shall PM you if Google can't help me, but I won't bother you over winter break because of the holidays and school :)
caching12
#9
Hello there, I've requested for a review. Thank you.