∗Review: You Make Everything Okay∗
❋CANDY FLOSS REVIEWS❋ || Closed Until Further Notice ||YOU MAKE EVERYTHING OKAY
AUTHOR: kjdzyx
REVIEWED BY: EXOcrux
TITLE: (3/5)
The title was good and fitted well with your story. However, I think it's too long and did not stand out to me. Just trying to imagine the story through it gave an impression that it would involve some heavy drama, which was not really the case. Plus it was kind of cheesy. The title was fine as it was but if you could think of another one (probably shorter) then that would be great.
FOREWORD/DESCRIPTION: (9/10)
The description was short but highly interesting. In fact, it hooked me into reading your story more than the title. But maybe you should take into consideration that the words 'home' and 'haven' could pertain to the same thing albeit at different degrees. To some readers, this might sound repetitive. You can use one of the two, but not both.
PLOT: (20/25)
For a thousand word (or so) fic, I did not really expect an intricate plot. This was shown as the story focused on how Jongin and Kyungsoo did their parts in creating balance to their relationship. The story was realistic enough that people could feel themselves relate to the Kyungsoo's situation. I personally liked these kinds of stories but because it was short, some readers might felt lacking that the story ended just like that. Of course you must have your reason for making it that way (maybe the contest?) but the story could have been more relatable and intimate if it was a bit longer.
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