∗Review: 41 Days∗

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41 DAYS

AUTHOR: AmeYuki

REVIEWED BY: Babyorange

TITLE: (4/5)

Though your title isn’t the most eye-catching nor unique, I must say it works well with the plot without giving too much away.

FOREWORD/DESCRIPTION: (7/10)

The quote at the beginning is very appropriate for these types of stories, so that was really good. However, I thought your description gave a little too much away. Forewords/descriptions are generally for teasers and bits of background information, where your description was more like a synopsis. This much information makes your first few chapters a little redundant, so I recommend cutting everything after “Kim Sunggyu had the perfect life. But a perfect life doesn't last long. He soon became busy because of his work and started to neglect what was truly important in life: the people he loved.” However, it’s only my opinion.

PLOT: (23/25)

Your plot isn’t the most original out there and I’m not saying it’s a bad thing. What differentiates a good story from a cliche story is t

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StoicBread #1 May 22, 2016 09:41:00

Hi ^.^! Do you accept affiliations request? If so,
http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/1123113

caching12 #2 Jan 9, 2016 23:32:42

Chapter 26: I didn't expect such a high score tho lol. Thanks for the review! Will credit later when I'm on PC.

sunflowerpots #3 Jan 6, 2016 20:40:28

Chapter 25: thank you for the review!!^^

kjdzyx #4 Dec 27, 2015 03:17:23

Chapter 23: thank you so much for the review!!! :D :D I was trying out new writing style with this fic so these feedbacks are really important to me! and thank you for spotting those grammatical mistakes >.< I tend to mess up grammar often...
but may I ask that you mentioned "lack of necessary articles like 'the'", but I couldn't find where I need to put 'the' in the fic. Yes Ii have re-read it but I guess I still don't know where I've missed out the word?
anyways I really appreciate the review! It's very helpful and I am glad I request from you :) have a nice day~~

JaeKnight #5 Dec 25, 2015 09:04:21

requested for a review! Merry Christmas! <3

Manlyluhaniie #6 Dec 23, 2015 12:51:40

Requested for a review ^^

sunflowerpots #7 Dec 23, 2015 12:09:25

I've requested for a review!!^^

mistressdean #8 Dec 23, 2015 01:05:02

Chapter 22: Because it is crucially important to me, THANK YOU SO MUCH for the grammar section. I didn't get a beta-reader because I'm doing the editing myself over winter break and didn't want to waste anyone's time to comb through my story, so thank you for this.

LOL. No, in Chapter 000, this was only an exaggeration about Jungkook, but I can't blame you for taking it seriously though. The sarcasm was subtle. Anyways, for that reason, Jungkook hasn't moved up in school (like Sheldon from Big Bang Theory, that lil smart haha). Yes, Jungkook is smarter than most, but he's not a certified genius and it's why he treats his position in school with contempt.
I'm sorry. I don't explain my characters to reviewers like this because it sounds like I'm "defending" myself, but I wanted to point out that TDoJ is strong in its exaggeration. Haha.

No, I'm not offended at all! Not about the cliché-ness, not about the long chapters, none of that. I embrace the cliché-ness, tbh. Plus, I know there are chunks I could cut out of the story (which is what I'm doing right now. Lord help me.), but other than that, I'm used to this reaction and I like the different perspectives. Honestly, it flatters me that despite everything said in your review, you found great enjoyment in my story while remaining a critical reviewer throughout it. (Okay, I'm sorry for this feedback that isn't really feedback.)

At last, thank you for your corrections, advice, and time! I will have a second pair of eyes to help me after I do the first round of editing. Thank you for the honest and critical review and I'll credit right away! If any troubles or questions arise, I shall PM you if Google can't help me, but I won't bother you over winter break because of the holidays and school :)

caching12 #9 Dec 21, 2015 00:50:41

Hello there, I've requested for a review. Thank you.