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You (Hana) loved your former school. It was close to your neighborhood, you had a lot of friends, and you were an average student, but then your parents decided that it was time to move into a bigger house in a bigger (richer) neighborhood and enroll you to an expensive school. It was torture. You missed everyone, even that boy who had mutual feelings for you...and you guys were just starting to get closer.

Being the jolly,and positive type of person, you finally decided it would be fun.

Your first day of school was going on smoothly..bumpy? The school and Tae-Hyun wasn't going to be nice. You're an outsider. And everybody hates an outsider, except for a few.

It's a good thing you were able to meet Ae Cha, she becomes a close friend who'm you trust. She also has this thing for one of Tae-Hyuns friends, Min-Ki, which is a bad idea. I mean, Ae Cha is a sweet girl and everything...or not. She's sort of evil in a good way:) she likes to keep things to herself but trusts Hana the most.

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Foreword

My first story...hope you guys like it...please also help me!!! give me tips and siggestions on how my story can improve!!!

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BadOppa #1
I would say the first paragraph is about as much as you would need for a description. Maybe trim it down a bit and add something more enquiring.

The rest is just basically stating the characters and their personalities—which is something you don't want.

Mention where the people are from—group-wise.

Add tags like the characters name. "Romance" instead of "koreanromance".

Also, you use a lot of ellipsis (…). Careful with those. So, don't use them as often.

Another important thing! Have you planned out your story? If not, you should delete this one.

Plan your story out and then after you find the perfect title and description (and you've written all your chapters), you can repost it again.
It avoids mainly writers block and late updates.
Hope this helped. :)
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