Chapter 9

Teaser

HANAS POV

You looked at the mirror and straightened your back. Another day of school. Thursday and Friday went well, and you thought that the rest of the days would be fine. The school accepted you.

"Ae Chan, are you okay? You look EXTRA gloomy." You said.

"Do I?" She glared at you and just kept walking.

"Are you still thinking of Hyo?" You suddenly blurted out without meaning to.

"I feel nothing for him." You decided to let it go this time.

When you arrived in school Ae Chan was called to the principals office, you were left alone to talk to your classroom. As you walked confidently you noticed that your batchmates have been staring at you. Do I have dirt on my face or something? You started to wonder as you quickly ran to the bathroom and hid your face. Nothing is wrong, maybe im just imagining.

"We heard." Eun came out of one of the bathroom stalls.

"What are you talking about?"

"Tae-Hyun placed everyone on red duty." She took out her red lipstick from her pocket and started to apply it on her lips/

"Red duty?"

"Everyone except you, that is." She stopped for a while to look at you. "You're the target."

She left the bathroom.

"Crap." You remembered what Ae Chan said. If the crowd doesn't like you...they really don't like you.

TAE-HYUNS POV

"Who's our target?" One of your classmates asked.

"The new kid." You didn't know her name, but everybody knew who the new kid was, so there was no point in even knowing it.

"You mean Hana?" Eun sat beside you, being too close you moved away.

"Is that her name?" Hana. 

"What do you want us to do?" She asked.

"Just scare her...for now." You smiled.

You didn't want them to do too much, they might steal your spotlight.

You decided to look for Hana and start it off.

"Red duty guys." You reminded everyone who passed by you.

"There she is." You said to yourself.

Seeing her sitting in one corner made you smile, the red duty hasn't even started and its already affected her.

"Hey, you look troublesome, you need any help?" You teased, but she didn't reply, she didn't even bother to look up. 'Excuse me-"

"Shush!" She snapped.

"Don't tell me to shut up you-"

"Shush," she says even louder. "I'm trying to concentrate."

You were shocked. You expected her to be worrying...crying, actually, but instead she was doing whatever the hell she was doing.

"What are you doing?" You suddenly forgot why you went up to her.

She looked up and you saw, on the floor, a sick bird.

"I read in the fairy tales that if you chant 'I Believe' and concentrate really hard, you'll get what you want. I belive this bird is going to get well." She was like a child, this girl.

"That's stupid!" You grabbed the bird and walked to the nearest window.

"Give her back!" She stood up and tried to get the bird from you. 

You threw the bird outside, instead of flying it fell all the way down from the fourth floor to the last. Then it lay on the ground, motionless. You were motionless. You noticed that Hana stopped grabbing your arm and was gone. You were happy that you pissed her off, but killing something...it was different.

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BadOppa
#1
I would say the first paragraph is about as much as you would need for a description. Maybe trim it down a bit and add something more enquiring.

The rest is just basically stating the characters and their personalities—which is something you don't want.

Mention where the people are from—group-wise.

Add tags like the characters name. "Romance" instead of "koreanromance".

Also, you use a lot of ellipsis (…). Careful with those. So, don't use them as often.

Another important thing! Have you planned out your story? If not, you should delete this one.

Plan your story out and then after you find the perfect title and description (and you've written all your chapters), you can repost it again.
It avoids mainly writers block and late updates.
Hope this helped. :)