Chapter 2

Teaser

You stood outside facing your house while holding hands with your friends Soo Jin, Hee young,  Mun-Hee and Sang-Ook.

Today you were leaving...Everything you have worked hard for. Leaving the friends you have known for three years, leaving the pride of giving yourself a name in your school, and leaving the only boy who will ever understand you...there is a chance of long distance relationship though.

"We are so going to visit you" Your friends started to hug you.

"You better!" You hugged them tighter. "I'm going to die of boredom there!"

"Can I join in?" Jae-Sun arrived with his new sports car which he promised you a free wild ride in one day.

All your friends evacuated and left space for you to hug Jae-Sun.

"I'm sorry if this won't work out well, I evjoyed every moment with you-" He placed his pointing finger on your lips.

"This isn't over between us" He smiled, and so did you.

"Wow," You took your time while looking at your friends. "Hee-Young, I will miss watching you flirt with random boys in the mall. Soo-Jin, our inside jokes will live on forever. Sang-Ook, you trouble maker! Take care of my Soo-Jin *wink*. Mun-Hee, I won't be here to help you with school...so work hard. Jae-Sun, like you said, this isn't over between us."

"Hana!" Your father called you. "It's time to go!"

You embraced your friends one last time and entered your car. Tears were falling from your face, but you wiped them away before you parents even notice.

"Those friends of yours are really so nice." Your mother said. "You can always invite them over sometime even though its far. Even that boy your dating...Jae-Sun."

"sure mom, sure." You decided to change the subject. "What does the new neighborhood look like?"

"Oh it's really big, everybody who lives there have such class!" Your father said. "I just know you with love it. The park is enourmous, the club house, the pool, the everything!"

"It's beautiful dear." Your mother added. 

After a while you got bored and slept the whole ride.

"Were here!" You mother screamed excitedly.

When you opened your eyes you saq that your car was parked inside a big garage.

"wow, not bad." You said as you climed out of the car and took a good look at your new home. "Is my room nice?"

"We designed it just like your room in our old house." Your mother said. "It's on the second floor, third door to the right."

You carried your bags upstairs with your mouth open, shocked at how big and beautiful your new home looks like while also trying to keep up with what your mom was saying.

"We have a mini movie house with three black lazy boys, our backyard is like a farm...beautiful...and we have the guestroom right beside your room deary, and the basement is where our old stuff will be and we are giving the attic to you..." Your moms vioce faded awy as she entered the kitchen thinking that you were following her.

You threw yourself on the bed and closed your eyes.

This is all too much. Having a room bigger thasn my old one, even having the attic for myslef. I can place my telescope there and my other books incase it doesnt fit. Though im sure it will fit based on how I see the room...HUGE! with my own private bathroom too!

Your parents came in and lay beside you.

"This is what we have been saving for years," Your father said. "We just never told you because we didn't want to get your hopes up incase it wouldn't really be a success."

You hugged your parents. You didn't know why...maybe it was to show how thankful you are...which was a lie. But you wanted your parents to be happy.

***

It was all too fast for you. A week past and you got used to the sudden change of environment. You spent your days biking around and spending time in the park. You loved watching DVDs in the mini movie house. You sleep late everynight because of talking to your friends and scanning your pictures in facebook. 

One night Jae-Sun was online and you two chatted.

Jae-Sun: Hey, im sorry i wasnt able to call you...im kind of grounded so my parents took my cellphone...they dont even know im using the computer now,   haha, somehow I knew you were going to be online:)

Hana: Haha,what did you do this time?

Jae-Sun: Just came home really late from my cousins party, Min Ju

Hana: Tell her I said hi

It took you hours before saying goodnight and giong to sleep. Your mistake? school is tomorrow.

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BadOppa
#1
I would say the first paragraph is about as much as you would need for a description. Maybe trim it down a bit and add something more enquiring.

The rest is just basically stating the characters and their personalities—which is something you don't want.

Mention where the people are from—group-wise.

Add tags like the characters name. "Romance" instead of "koreanromance".

Also, you use a lot of ellipsis (…). Careful with those. So, don't use them as often.

Another important thing! Have you planned out your story? If not, you should delete this one.

Plan your story out and then after you find the perfect title and description (and you've written all your chapters), you can repost it again.
It avoids mainly writers block and late updates.
Hope this helped. :)