Chapter 1

Teaser

"I'll see you in school next week?" This was the third date that you have been with Jae-Sun.

"Sure." You gave him a kiss on the cheek, which you have never done before and smiled.

He waited until you entered your house then drove away.

You had a feeling that this relationship would go well. Obviously you two fit each other perfectly. He was cool and smooth while you were jolly and not trying hard to be someone you're not. That was what Jae-Sun liked about you. All the other girls acted flirty around him, but he didn't find it comfortable. He wasn't the type of guy who tried to attatch himself to girls in "that way", except for you.

"You're finally home," Your mother was sitting on the couch with your father beside her. "How was your date?"

"Good" You blushed.

"Honey, we need to talk to you." You father signalled you to sit on the sofa across from them and switched the television off.

"What is it?" You breathed deeply while you waited for whatever they were going to say.

"We're moving." You mother said too excited and too loud.

Your whole body froze, even the expression in your face. You smiled (fake smile) and nodded.

"I know you're excited too, you will love the new house." Your father said.

"I'm sorry, but why didn't you tell me we were movnig? or that you guys bought a new house? Last I checked I was a part of this family." You said after a short pause.

"We wanted it to be a surprise!" Your mother stood up and held both of your hands.

"You...you can't do this. My school is starting in a week. Moving might...might just shock me and-" Your father cut you off.

"Oh, we also enrolled you to a new school."

"YOU WHAT?!" Yous tood up and moved away from you parents. "WHY?" You watched as your father and mother changed their expression into dissapointment.

"Honey, this new place, new village, is very very very far from here..." Your mother said. "It's much better too. Our new house is A LOT bigger, and your school is expensive which makes it a good school." (for your mom, whatever is more expensive is better)

"But mom, my life is here, my Home is here! You can't take it from me!" You ran up the stairs and threw yourself on the bed.

How can they do this to me? All of my firneds are here, if I transfer then who would I have? and what about my favorite mall and my favorite restaurant which my friends and I always go to?

As you went through all those things...you fell asleep last imagining the faces of your friends...especially Jae-Sun.

 

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BadOppa
#1
I would say the first paragraph is about as much as you would need for a description. Maybe trim it down a bit and add something more enquiring.

The rest is just basically stating the characters and their personalities—which is something you don't want.

Mention where the people are from—group-wise.

Add tags like the characters name. "Romance" instead of "koreanromance".

Also, you use a lot of ellipsis (…). Careful with those. So, don't use them as often.

Another important thing! Have you planned out your story? If not, you should delete this one.

Plan your story out and then after you find the perfect title and description (and you've written all your chapters), you can repost it again.
It avoids mainly writers block and late updates.
Hope this helped. :)