Redundant... Maybe a lottle. It means a little, but a lot.
A Fan Fiction Writer's GuideDon't start multiple sentences, not even two, in a row with the same beginning.
Example:
Carter was pulled from his thoughts when he heard a loud bang. Carter craned his neck and saw a tall guy with burnt hair and clothes. Carter watched as the stranger began to-
THEY JUST STOPPED. NO.
One, that's so flat and boring. Two, IT'S LITERALLY SO REDUNDANT, IT MAKES ME WANT TO CRY AS A READER. I review as a reader, not a writer.
If you write a story, try something a little like this:
However, Carter didn’t have long to think before someone busted into the room wearing a metal pack, goggles, and singed clothing—his messy, blond hair was just as burnt which gave off an abhorrent smell. When he entered, he immediately got to work on a black control box to the left of the door, pulling multiple tools from his belt. In record time he had deactivated the cuffs, which fell to Carter’s side with a loud clanking that reverberated off the empty walls. Carter sat up and rubbed his wrists, seeing that there were red marks from his previous struggles.
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