The Flower that Brings Death [M]

by terrachipzx

Angst, Drama, Action

Kim Taeyeon knows better than anyone else what happens behind the seemingly perfect kpop world.

Title: 8/10

I liked how the title sounded mysterious but I don't see how it's related to the title. Maybe it will explained later in the fanfic but I don't see it yet. Your title was also too long for my liking and it doesn't give a powerful impression. 

Story Description: 8/10

It was a short description but it really packed a punch. The only thing I ask for is a little bit more. Just a little. It seems a bit vague.

Graphics: 5/5

Grammar / Vocabulary: 17/20

There were a couple minor errors that could be fixed. Some words were misspelled and a few sentences were worded awkwardly. 

Story plot: 22/25

Since there are only two chapters in this fanfic so far, I don't know how the story will turn out. However based what I have read now, I liked how it began with Taeyeon in her present time and then flashes back to her past story to build from it. I could tell that the story was well thought out and balanced but the thing that I have frustration over was the conflict. Yes I am only two chapters in, but I should at least get an idea about the conflict that will occur. I also would like to see more detail and describing in your story.

Characterization: 9/10

Each character has a personality that plays a role in the story but they are not distinct. You talked about some characters being mean but they sound like the same person to me. Every character should be unique and special. 

Creativity: 9/10

I see potential in this story but some scenes were predictable. 

Overall Enjoyment: 8/10

Overall Grade: B